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Authors, Part Thirty-two
You have received a reply from the author, BlakDawn, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: Project: Night Fox
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6699322/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2185266/
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thanks for taking the time to review my soties, many don't.
aside from the setences thing, which is difficult to change without time to
think everything else is done.
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Name: Swissigar
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2497215/
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Subject: Reviews
First I'm hardly angry. I'm part of the Order of the Concritter which does
what you did except in a lighter tone.
I'm not sure if it is somewhere but as I said this is my first attempt at a
Pokemon story. I hardly know anything on how this fandom is done.
I may be able to argue some of your points though...
1.Oh, come on. Is seeing some pokemon stuff actually that stressful that you'd
act like it's some horrible nightmare?
Well you wake up in a completely different setting. That's unsettling.
2.You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't
capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard.
Like I said, new to this fandom. I'll keep an eye out for that. I suppose I
could defend myself and say those are their names.
3."Its" is possessive, as in "its story" and "it's" means
"it is".
So wait are you saying its = it's?
4....and Team Rocket happens to show up just at that moment, and because
they've got the idiot ball, think it's a good idea to flatten a town for not
immediately obeying, thus destroying anything of value to them, and it just
happens they somehow have his pokemon and are using it.
Eh, I'll hand it to you, that is a good plot hole.
5.There are four thousand stories just on this site in this category with
"pokemon" in their title. There are three hundred "chronicles", more
if you
include misspellings, almost as many with "begins" and "beginning",
and god
knows how many "Character Name"'s whatever. There are almost five hundred with
"legend". There are over eight hundred with "journey", seven hundred
and fifty
with "story", two hundred with "quest", and nine hundred and fifty
with
"adventure". "Kanto" and "Sinnoh" shows up two hundred
times, with "Johto" and
"Hoenn" around one hundred and fifty. "Saga", "region" and
"champion" come in
at around a hundred. What I'm getting at here is that you want to choose an
original title that has to do with your story in particular, not something
that indicates it's yet another story about a pokemon trainer.
I was absolutely flat for names. If you have an idea I'm all ears.
6.Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The
goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker
means you start a new paragraph.
I'll keep that in mind.
7.Do not use " for thoughts. Ever. It just looks like your character is
talking to themself.
Alright then, so then what do I use?
8.Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never
"Hello."
He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello"
he said. The only
exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in
which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he
grinned or
"Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's
a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled
is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete
sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he
said, "this is it."
or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence
in the
middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb
in the
break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is
it."
I'm confused, could you explain the error?
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Name: Raging Typhoon Wolf
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1794813/
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Subject: re: Your review to Pokemon Purple
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6699362/
Hello Farla. I appreciate the review. After looking it over there was some
spelling mistakes I can take my time off from school and work on carefully.
Thank you for the review once again. I thought no one was reading this till
you popped up. Bye^^
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Name: xxxrocketbabexxx
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2600529/
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Subject: re: Your review to Memorable Moments
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6699016/
Hi Farla, I have been told about you from someone. Thanks for the review, I
will take it on board as constructive critisism and try to improve my grammer,
which you clearly picked out. As I stated in my profile I admit my writing
skills are not the best at the moment however theres always room for
improvement. Everyone has to start somewhere and I see the more I write, the
better I will become and the less errors I will make.
In reply to your statements about how I have chosen Cassidy to fall pregnant
may not be very acurate because I have never been in the situation myself. I
have read that antibiotics can interfere with birth control pills working
effectivly. How Cassidy finds this out she could have looked it up or someone
may have told her when it was too late. OR the way I see Cassidy she is very
stubborn and will refuse to take fault in things, when she told Butch she may
have been just taking the blame off herself and onto her doctor. Anythings
possible with Cass
About Cassidys morals that she couldnt bring herself to have a abortion, she
hates children (the twerps) however I think when it's her child, she would
think differently. Not to mention its Butch's child too. She wouldnt abort his
baby.(I couldnt have her abort anyways because I'm writing further fics that
continue from this one)
And finally, The part about her being weepy was not to make her look weak or
submissive at all. she was clearly stressed of the situation and nervous how
she was going to tell Butch. Also the hormones would have contributed to her
being emothional.
Thanks for the review Farla, hope that clears a few points up
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You have received a reply from the author, Alando, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: Memento Mori
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6699844/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2054417/
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I thought we went through this? I know your trying to help but as long as FF
see's nothing wrong with it, I see no reason to change it. That being said I
am trying to take your information on board and use it. So thank you for
teying to help me.
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This wasn't even one of those where I mentioned capitalization.
Name: PokeMaster123
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2638837/
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Subject: "A Trainers Journey"
That was just my Epilogue. The actuall first chapter IS going to be much
longer. But thanks for your concern anyway.
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Name: Paulover98
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2628397/
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Subject: Thanks
...thanks for the grammer lesson.
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Name: Sapphire'sDestiny
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2717722/
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Subject: re: Your review to Heroes of Hoenn
Farla, I understand what you're getting at. But, please remember, I''m new at
this. I know you're helping. And by the way, thanks for the bit about the
name. It took ages to think of an individual name for it. The chapters will be
a bit harder, won't they?
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Name: hand65
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2715482/
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Subject: re: Your review to Aura Heroes
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6684011/
Nodoby cares! Only a hobknocker would care about that kind of stuff!
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You have received a reply from the author, Michigo Sinister, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Julia's Story
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6699798/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2715229/
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Ok look Farla. I was curious and read some of your topics. For the
Capitalizion, say whatever you want, I'm doing whatever I want for that. Just
so you know, I did try and not capitalize the names but it didn't look right
to me.
Tell me how my character is a sue? Yes she's Ash and Misty's daughter. Yes
she's going to go on a journey for the badges just like Ash did. But she's
different from them. You would know that if you read more of the story.
It's not a parody of any kind. Yes I got the beginning idea from a moive I
watched, but you cannot say that I'm the only writer who does that. You've
probably have done that a couple times yourself and probably didn't even know
it.
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Name: Purple Banjo Monster
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2720213/
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Subject: re: Your review to Untitled
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6693916/
I'm actually not continuing the story because I don't care enough about it.
This isn't why I write though. You have every right to criticize my grammar
and I know it isn't good. However, my story isn't really something you can
slam. It's cool if you don't like it or if you have problems with the
character. That was actually the point. I wanted him to start out as an
unlikeable person but go through a character arc that changes him and humbles
him. It would make him less arrogant through his experiences. I wasn't even
going to make it involving pokemon or anything fanfiction for that matter. It
was going to be based in the real world, not even involving animals or
anything like that. But I wanted feedback on the story itself, not how much
someone hated the character. However, this is the only website I could find
where you could easily post stories so I had to make it about something that
was already a popular show or game since this website isn't for original
material. I'm sorry you didn't like it, and maybe I should I just write it the
way it should be written. Without any pop culture items, or fan fiction. I'm
not saying there's anything wrong with that, it's just not for me. Anyway,
like I said, I'm no longer going to be on this site, but I'm not deleting my
account because I don't know how nor do I care enough to find out how. Again,
sorry you weren't pleased with my writing, and thanks for the grammar tips. I
actually wasn't sure how to those dialogue cutouts but now I know. Thanks
again.
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You have received a reply from the author, Sashimio, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: Child of the Deities
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6700960/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1365056/
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I know I suck .
I'm gonna rewrite the whole story!!!
Sorry!!!! I know this was really bad...even for a first attempt...
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Name: Sashimio
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1365056/
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Subject: .
I'm just saying, thank you for taking the time to review and write a...mad
long review...that was also quite a bit...disheartening but no worries! I
appreciate that you took time from your life to construct a review for me!
Thank you and I won't delete my story but I'll re-write it so that there's
less mistakes, and the plot can be fully understood! Thank you once again for
taking the time to review!!!
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Name: Crazyalter
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2716600/
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Subject: thanks for the help and advice
thanks for the things you said about my story, but to tell the truth it was a
quick rush one, but even though it suck thanks for even reading it well that's
all i came to say
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You have received a reply from the author, shadow13275, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: The Great Luvdisc Migration
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6702200/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2244784/
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Thank you for the tip in the second paragraph, but I disagree for the first. I
just follow how it written in the game, where as the Pokemon species are
capital.
I think the best example is the Sentry Duty, where pretty much every Pokemon's
name is capitalized.
ex: "Well, it's TRUE that you don't see any Riolu (or any other Pokemon you
play as) in these parts..."
Also, I believe Bulbapedia capitalize Pokemon species, too
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Name: Cheerfulshadow3
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2378792/
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Subject: re: Your review to Dark Beauty
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6703485/
Thank you for the advice!
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Story: Butterfly Wings
Chapter: 1. The Second Day
From: Blaze-Fire-Kitty ( http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1529648/ )
Reply URL: http://login.fanfiction.net/review_pm.php?reviewid=120180647
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Oh, you're the one who reviewed my fanfic 'Luminescence' and so rudely pointed
out that the moon doesn't really disappear during the day. Well, I would just
like to tell you that I am very highly aware that the moon never disappears,
and that it is always present, just usually only visible at night.
Maybe you should feel a little bad for flaming people and giving them such
hurtful reviews. You're hurting people's feelings and making some people want
to give up writing, and that's a very terrible thing to do. Please stop being
so immature and getting so upset about your own non-existent writing skills,
and get a life. Thanks. C:
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...how the fuck do you manage to be this stupid? I mean really. They obviously didn't know, so they must have looked it up eventually, and yet they now think something that's even more wrong.
Name: Hikarru
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1225942/
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Subject: re: Your review to Pokemon Wars
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6705101/
Thank you for reviewing! I took your criticism in to consideration and a lot
of it helped. However, I like my text and the way I format my stories, so
that's not going to change. And I don't care if Ali is a sue, because many
people like my OC Ali. And even if you don't like my stories, many others do.
Thanks for reviewing anyway!!! :D
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You have received a reply from the author, themagebear, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: The Field Badge
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6703744/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/949459/
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ignoring the comments the magebear can make regarding your grammar nazi
attitude, the magebear will just say that this is the first chapter, and if
you arent happy with the way we do things, then feel free to write a story the
way you think it should be done.
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You have received a reply from the author, NinjaMai, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: 追溯他的足跡 Retracing his Footsteps
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6701808/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2333664/
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...having fun?
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Name: Soldier of the Future
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1833485/
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Subject: re: Your review to Pokemon Heroes: The Rebellion Saga
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6701508/
First of all, I'm glad you're trying to provide some tips, but your criticism
seems to be pure flat out offensive instead. Are you saying I should make
everything make sense? Your demand for logic is laughable.
And no OCs? What do you have against them? There have been plenty of stories
with them and have been successful. It's a fanfic. It's not meant to please
everyone. If you don't like a story with OCs, then why are you reading one?
One final point, I find your review to be hilarious as it's a blatant copy of
the many you've sent to the other Pokemon fics there. I'm sorry, your review
isn't constructive, it's just a big middle finger pointed right to my to my
story.
There's a line between providing constructive feedback and being a total jerk.
You may be a veteran writer with your collection of stories, but your
arrogance makes me laugh. I have never seen someone go so rough on my stories,
so unless you learn how to review properly, I'm restricting you from sending
me more trash that simply hurts the writer instead of improving their
motivation.
I don't give a damn if you believed you're the most skilled writer on the
planet, but don't shove your beliefs down other writers' throats. You wouldn't
like it if people bashed your story like some zealot with ridiculous beliefs
now, hmm? I've seen plenty of reviews regarding to your atrociousness and
attacks on others in your stories. You make a Grammar Nazi look good with your
rules.
If you don't like a story to begin with, DON'T READ IT. Consider yourself
blocked, and good day.
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Name: Dark Spear of Destiny
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2675957/
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Subject: Thanks A Bunch!
Thanks for the advice. I really appreciate it. As you can see, I'm a new
writer and dont know much about fan-fiction at all. So I will need advices
like that. Feel free to correct my (Many) other mistakes as well.and yeah, i
know about my mistakes now, and I WILL try to improve. You seem to be a very
experienced writer, your number of stories is astonishing.And they really got
me thinking philosophically.I will need a teacher like you, to guide me. Once
again, thanks a bunch.
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Name: BlitzUltimate09
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1672799/
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Subject: My Story
Thanks for the advice, this is only my third story written, but how exactly do
I space it out, because when I typed it up it looked fine but when I submitted
my story it turned out in the format you just read, I just need advice. P.S. I
hoped you liked it but I'll get it re-formatted. One more thing, I like your
profile picture it's cute.
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Name: BlitzUltimate09
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1672799/
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Subject: My Pokemon Story
Just let you know I deleted it, and I'm going to make those changes, your
review really did help and I thank you again for telling me what I need to
fix.
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Name: TheGirlNextDoor523
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2322326/
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Subject: re: Your review to One of the Chosen
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6696950/
Oh... hee, hee, thanks for the info and review... maybe I should let my sister
check my writing-she's good with grammer of these sorts-even though I remember
SOME stuff she said... I always knew I had a problem with some grammer
lessons. Hm, anyways, thanks for the info!
And, by the way, 'When I thought I would be asleep forever, I woke up', I
meant it as her thinking that she had died. You know... the previous chapter
she went over a waterfall... and she was surprised that she was still alive.
But I guess some people don't see it from my point of view... hm.... I'll have
to work on that.
Thanks!
When cats fly,
TheGirlNextDoor523
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You have received a reply from the author, AruaPearl44, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: Return
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6703280/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2147897/
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Hey! I don't critizize you. So I think it's rude that your doing it to me.
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I'd like to take a moment to unpack this one.
Much as I love that fandom is full of female writers, it also means it's got some of the more toxic parts you get with female groups. This is usually couched in positive language, like trying to get along and accommodate others.
What you get is people having the idea all interactions are done on personal, emotional lines. Saying something that upsets you is an attack. Either it's unprovoked, in which case the person is one of those mean popular girls, or it's because of something you did to anger them first.
Criticism, in this framework, is done solely to tear the other person down. It's not even that the person believes the criticism is invented, it's that they don't believe that matters. The only reason to point out actual errors is jockeying for social power, and if there aren't errors I'd still have said there were.
It's a horrible way of thinking.
Name: Jordach
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2726051/
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Subject: re: Your review to Jordade's History
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6702975/
Well, all noobs pretty much do this, the English in England is different to
say, America, Word has the habit of telling me "long sentance" constanly which
otherwise, you could be my beta reader... ;)
- Jordach
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what the hell
Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: Leaf the Earth Guardian ( http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2600296/ )
Reply URL: http://login.fanfiction.net/review_pm.php?reviewid=120206790
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OK, first of all, there is no description of the characters whatsoever. Second
of all, stop writing mean reviews for people's stories! Now you are about to
taste your own medicine, or like I would say it, go jump off a cliff, moron!
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I think their tense here is only because they hadn't yet hit enter when typing the sentence, as sadly I've had no further reviews from them.
Name: Parabyte
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2724914/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Real Rise Of Darkrai
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6704364/
Pokemon have names. Charizard, Clefairy, they are all names. Not just what
they are called. Are the authorized books written like that? How about the
games? No.
FYI, I was referring to 'The Darkrai'. Not one of the many Darkrai, 'The
Darkrai' in the movie.
Think of it this way: You just heard The Rise Of Darkrai is coming out, what
are your first thoughts? Is Darkrai a hero, or a villian? They made him a hero
in the movie. This is him as a villian.
I know it is short. I am working on the second chapter right now. 2nd chapter
is about 2,000 words long, maybe more. And, I'm not starting a new chapter
with each scene. This is how the story is, starting off with a quickie just to
get your mind thinking about what could be coming next.
I apologize for that, it was a typo, and I missed it.
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Name: Jordach
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2726051/
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Subject: re: Your review to Jordade's History
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6702975/
actually something happens in the timeline, causing a chain reaction and
wa-bam jordades mom mutates. Also a ralts tends to be with her mother throught
the 1st evolution then no longer needs its mothers milk.
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oh god please stop talking you win okay
Name: shipperboyx
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2660856/
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Subject: re: Your review to alon in fiore
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6703272/
well no one asked you on your apinyon
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You have received a reply from the author, Oliver Jasmine, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Still In Translation
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6701464/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2588906/
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Thank you very much for the input. I didn't want to reply until I was done
revising! I editted it plenty to make things more clear, and got a friend to
beta read. A friend in college who learned grammar better than me. I'm a
senior in high school, but they never really taught that kinda stuff much '
I'm trying to portray something unusual in a more normal light... I went too
far in that direction and made my point unclear.
I'd appreciate it if you could have another look,its still pretty short and
all.
Thank you again for the review.
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Name: Skully-Chan
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2494752/
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Subject: Ty :3
Hey, thanks for reviewing my story! I relize I did make alot of mistakes and I
thank you for the advice. Ironic because your storys are really what got me
into fan fiction, even though they can be kinda morbid. Any way, ty again. :3
ttfn
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Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: YOU STUPID FAG ()
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YOUR WRITING IS TERRIBLE! i cant believe how rude you are to other people's
pokemon stories, who are clearly BETTER than yours. UR A STUPID BITCH!
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Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: too lazy 4 an account ()
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Ok, I have over a billion complaints for you, you fucking jackass. I've seen
your reviews to other fics and they're getting downright annoying. You keep
repeating the same fucking things OVER AND OVER AND OVER AGAIN! We don't
fucking care anymore! By repeating things, you are totally getting rid of the
purpose of a review. Any random idiot can copy and paste stuff together, but
reviews are supposed to come from the heart.
You've always been correcting us in grammar, and I respect that, BUT YOU'RE
FUCKING ANNOYING. GO DIR IN A HOLE ALREADY YOU BASTARD! We are not
preschoolers that don't know the difference between there and their. WE KNOW
THINGS, IDIOT. You don't need to shove into our faces that you have better
grammar. This just shows the kind of conceited bastard you are.
Anyway, after telling you all about your reviewing faults, it's about time I
tell you this story's faults.
1. It lacks emotion. So what if you have the best grammar in the world! All of
that crap doesn't matter if you cant connect with your audience. Stories
aren't meant to show people how good you are at writing, it's used to convey
the feelings of the characters. EVERYTHING LACKED EMOTION. Emotion is the most
basic and important thing you need in a fic.
2. You're always complaining that we are so unoriginal. Well wake up dude!
Your first scene is a guy waking up. HOW FUCKING CLICHE IS THAT? If you're
complaining to us about unoriginality, go fix your problems first.
3. Your writing is TOO poetic. You lost my interest within the first sentence.
It took too long for a single thing to happen and your story really didnt get
anywhere.
SO IF YOU'RE GOING TO COMPLAIN ABOUT OUR WRITING, FIX YOUR FUCKING WORK TOO!
GO DIE IN A HOLE YOU DOUCHEBAG! And if you're offended by this review, GOOD!
This is exactly how everyone else feels! You fucking bastard.
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Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: Anonymous ()
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Your stories have no sense of emotion. Your reviews towards other stories are
disrespectful and put down the writer. I have read your reviews to numerous
stories, and I believe that this is coming from your anger from other reviews.
You are also using God's name in vain, and you have no right to do that. So
get a life, jackass.
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These came within a few minutes of each other. People, learn to troll properly.
Story: Butterfly Wings
Chapter: 1. The Second Day
From: you should know- guess ()
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yes, i agree with the review below! you do hurt peoples feeings and that may
cause them to give up
IF YOU DON'T HAVE ANYTHING NICE TO SAY.. DON'T SAY IT AT ALL!
think about it- i've said it befoe but... think about why people give u bad
reviews?
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Also someone asked me to join their review guild or something.
posted for:
Title: Project: Night Fox
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6699322/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2185266/
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thanks for taking the time to review my soties, many don't.
aside from the setences thing, which is difficult to change without time to
think everything else is done.
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Name: Swissigar
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2497215/
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Subject: Reviews
First I'm hardly angry. I'm part of the Order of the Concritter which does
what you did except in a lighter tone.
I'm not sure if it is somewhere but as I said this is my first attempt at a
Pokemon story. I hardly know anything on how this fandom is done.
I may be able to argue some of your points though...
1.Oh, come on. Is seeing some pokemon stuff actually that stressful that you'd
act like it's some horrible nightmare?
Well you wake up in a completely different setting. That's unsettling.
2.You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't
capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard.
Like I said, new to this fandom. I'll keep an eye out for that. I suppose I
could defend myself and say those are their names.
3."Its" is possessive, as in "its story" and "it's" means
"it is".
So wait are you saying its = it's?
4....and Team Rocket happens to show up just at that moment, and because
they've got the idiot ball, think it's a good idea to flatten a town for not
immediately obeying, thus destroying anything of value to them, and it just
happens they somehow have his pokemon and are using it.
Eh, I'll hand it to you, that is a good plot hole.
5.There are four thousand stories just on this site in this category with
"pokemon" in their title. There are three hundred "chronicles", more
if you
include misspellings, almost as many with "begins" and "beginning",
and god
knows how many "Character Name"'s whatever. There are almost five hundred with
"legend". There are over eight hundred with "journey", seven hundred
and fifty
with "story", two hundred with "quest", and nine hundred and fifty
with
"adventure". "Kanto" and "Sinnoh" shows up two hundred
times, with "Johto" and
"Hoenn" around one hundred and fifty. "Saga", "region" and
"champion" come in
at around a hundred. What I'm getting at here is that you want to choose an
original title that has to do with your story in particular, not something
that indicates it's yet another story about a pokemon trainer.
I was absolutely flat for names. If you have an idea I'm all ears.
6.Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The
goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker
means you start a new paragraph.
I'll keep that in mind.
7.Do not use " for thoughts. Ever. It just looks like your character is
talking to themself.
Alright then, so then what do I use?
8.Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never
"Hello."
He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello"
he said. The only
exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in
which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he
grinned or
"Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's
a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled
is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete
sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he
said, "this is it."
or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence
in the
middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb
in the
break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is
it."
I'm confused, could you explain the error?
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Name: Raging Typhoon Wolf
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1794813/
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Subject: re: Your review to Pokemon Purple
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6699362/
Hello Farla. I appreciate the review. After looking it over there was some
spelling mistakes I can take my time off from school and work on carefully.
Thank you for the review once again. I thought no one was reading this till
you popped up. Bye^^
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Name: xxxrocketbabexxx
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2600529/
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Subject: re: Your review to Memorable Moments
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6699016/
Hi Farla, I have been told about you from someone. Thanks for the review, I
will take it on board as constructive critisism and try to improve my grammer,
which you clearly picked out. As I stated in my profile I admit my writing
skills are not the best at the moment however theres always room for
improvement. Everyone has to start somewhere and I see the more I write, the
better I will become and the less errors I will make.
In reply to your statements about how I have chosen Cassidy to fall pregnant
may not be very acurate because I have never been in the situation myself. I
have read that antibiotics can interfere with birth control pills working
effectivly. How Cassidy finds this out she could have looked it up or someone
may have told her when it was too late. OR the way I see Cassidy she is very
stubborn and will refuse to take fault in things, when she told Butch she may
have been just taking the blame off herself and onto her doctor. Anythings
possible with Cass
About Cassidys morals that she couldnt bring herself to have a abortion, she
hates children (the twerps) however I think when it's her child, she would
think differently. Not to mention its Butch's child too. She wouldnt abort his
baby.(I couldnt have her abort anyways because I'm writing further fics that
continue from this one)
And finally, The part about her being weepy was not to make her look weak or
submissive at all. she was clearly stressed of the situation and nervous how
she was going to tell Butch. Also the hormones would have contributed to her
being emothional.
Thanks for the review Farla, hope that clears a few points up
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You have received a reply from the author, Alando, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: Memento Mori
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6699844/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2054417/
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I thought we went through this? I know your trying to help but as long as FF
see's nothing wrong with it, I see no reason to change it. That being said I
am trying to take your information on board and use it. So thank you for
teying to help me.
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This wasn't even one of those where I mentioned capitalization.
Name: PokeMaster123
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2638837/
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Subject: "A Trainers Journey"
That was just my Epilogue. The actuall first chapter IS going to be much
longer. But thanks for your concern anyway.
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Name: Paulover98
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2628397/
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Subject: Thanks
...thanks for the grammer lesson.
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Name: Sapphire'sDestiny
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2717722/
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Subject: re: Your review to Heroes of Hoenn
Farla, I understand what you're getting at. But, please remember, I''m new at
this. I know you're helping. And by the way, thanks for the bit about the
name. It took ages to think of an individual name for it. The chapters will be
a bit harder, won't they?
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Name: hand65
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2715482/
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Subject: re: Your review to Aura Heroes
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6684011/
Nodoby cares! Only a hobknocker would care about that kind of stuff!
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You have received a reply from the author, Michigo Sinister, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Julia's Story
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6699798/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2715229/
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Ok look Farla. I was curious and read some of your topics. For the
Capitalizion, say whatever you want, I'm doing whatever I want for that. Just
so you know, I did try and not capitalize the names but it didn't look right
to me.
Tell me how my character is a sue? Yes she's Ash and Misty's daughter. Yes
she's going to go on a journey for the badges just like Ash did. But she's
different from them. You would know that if you read more of the story.
It's not a parody of any kind. Yes I got the beginning idea from a moive I
watched, but you cannot say that I'm the only writer who does that. You've
probably have done that a couple times yourself and probably didn't even know
it.
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Name: Purple Banjo Monster
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2720213/
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Subject: re: Your review to Untitled
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6693916/
I'm actually not continuing the story because I don't care enough about it.
This isn't why I write though. You have every right to criticize my grammar
and I know it isn't good. However, my story isn't really something you can
slam. It's cool if you don't like it or if you have problems with the
character. That was actually the point. I wanted him to start out as an
unlikeable person but go through a character arc that changes him and humbles
him. It would make him less arrogant through his experiences. I wasn't even
going to make it involving pokemon or anything fanfiction for that matter. It
was going to be based in the real world, not even involving animals or
anything like that. But I wanted feedback on the story itself, not how much
someone hated the character. However, this is the only website I could find
where you could easily post stories so I had to make it about something that
was already a popular show or game since this website isn't for original
material. I'm sorry you didn't like it, and maybe I should I just write it the
way it should be written. Without any pop culture items, or fan fiction. I'm
not saying there's anything wrong with that, it's just not for me. Anyway,
like I said, I'm no longer going to be on this site, but I'm not deleting my
account because I don't know how nor do I care enough to find out how. Again,
sorry you weren't pleased with my writing, and thanks for the grammar tips. I
actually wasn't sure how to those dialogue cutouts but now I know. Thanks
again.
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You have received a reply from the author, Sashimio, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: Child of the Deities
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6700960/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1365056/
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I know I suck .
I'm gonna rewrite the whole story!!!
Sorry!!!! I know this was really bad...even for a first attempt...
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Name: Sashimio
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1365056/
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Subject: .
I'm just saying, thank you for taking the time to review and write a...mad
long review...that was also quite a bit...disheartening but no worries! I
appreciate that you took time from your life to construct a review for me!
Thank you and I won't delete my story but I'll re-write it so that there's
less mistakes, and the plot can be fully understood! Thank you once again for
taking the time to review!!!
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Name: Crazyalter
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2716600/
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Subject: thanks for the help and advice
thanks for the things you said about my story, but to tell the truth it was a
quick rush one, but even though it suck thanks for even reading it well that's
all i came to say
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You have received a reply from the author, shadow13275, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: The Great Luvdisc Migration
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6702200/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2244784/
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Thank you for the tip in the second paragraph, but I disagree for the first. I
just follow how it written in the game, where as the Pokemon species are
capital.
I think the best example is the Sentry Duty, where pretty much every Pokemon's
name is capitalized.
ex: "Well, it's TRUE that you don't see any Riolu (or any other Pokemon you
play as) in these parts..."
Also, I believe Bulbapedia capitalize Pokemon species, too
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Name: Cheerfulshadow3
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2378792/
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Subject: re: Your review to Dark Beauty
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6703485/
Thank you for the advice!
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Story: Butterfly Wings
Chapter: 1. The Second Day
From: Blaze-Fire-Kitty ( http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1529648/ )
Reply URL: http://login.fanfiction.net/review_pm.php?reviewid=120180647
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Oh, you're the one who reviewed my fanfic 'Luminescence' and so rudely pointed
out that the moon doesn't really disappear during the day. Well, I would just
like to tell you that I am very highly aware that the moon never disappears,
and that it is always present, just usually only visible at night.
Maybe you should feel a little bad for flaming people and giving them such
hurtful reviews. You're hurting people's feelings and making some people want
to give up writing, and that's a very terrible thing to do. Please stop being
so immature and getting so upset about your own non-existent writing skills,
and get a life. Thanks. C:
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...how the fuck do you manage to be this stupid? I mean really. They obviously didn't know, so they must have looked it up eventually, and yet they now think something that's even more wrong.
Name: Hikarru
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1225942/
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Subject: re: Your review to Pokemon Wars
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6705101/
Thank you for reviewing! I took your criticism in to consideration and a lot
of it helped. However, I like my text and the way I format my stories, so
that's not going to change. And I don't care if Ali is a sue, because many
people like my OC Ali. And even if you don't like my stories, many others do.
Thanks for reviewing anyway!!! :D
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You have received a reply from the author, themagebear, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: The Field Badge
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6703744/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/949459/
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ignoring the comments the magebear can make regarding your grammar nazi
attitude, the magebear will just say that this is the first chapter, and if
you arent happy with the way we do things, then feel free to write a story the
way you think it should be done.
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You have received a reply from the author, NinjaMai, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: 追溯他的足跡 Retracing his Footsteps
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6701808/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2333664/
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...having fun?
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Name: Soldier of the Future
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1833485/
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Subject: re: Your review to Pokemon Heroes: The Rebellion Saga
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6701508/
First of all, I'm glad you're trying to provide some tips, but your criticism
seems to be pure flat out offensive instead. Are you saying I should make
everything make sense? Your demand for logic is laughable.
And no OCs? What do you have against them? There have been plenty of stories
with them and have been successful. It's a fanfic. It's not meant to please
everyone. If you don't like a story with OCs, then why are you reading one?
One final point, I find your review to be hilarious as it's a blatant copy of
the many you've sent to the other Pokemon fics there. I'm sorry, your review
isn't constructive, it's just a big middle finger pointed right to my to my
story.
There's a line between providing constructive feedback and being a total jerk.
You may be a veteran writer with your collection of stories, but your
arrogance makes me laugh. I have never seen someone go so rough on my stories,
so unless you learn how to review properly, I'm restricting you from sending
me more trash that simply hurts the writer instead of improving their
motivation.
I don't give a damn if you believed you're the most skilled writer on the
planet, but don't shove your beliefs down other writers' throats. You wouldn't
like it if people bashed your story like some zealot with ridiculous beliefs
now, hmm? I've seen plenty of reviews regarding to your atrociousness and
attacks on others in your stories. You make a Grammar Nazi look good with your
rules.
If you don't like a story to begin with, DON'T READ IT. Consider yourself
blocked, and good day.
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Name: Dark Spear of Destiny
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2675957/
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Subject: Thanks A Bunch!
Thanks for the advice. I really appreciate it. As you can see, I'm a new
writer and dont know much about fan-fiction at all. So I will need advices
like that. Feel free to correct my (Many) other mistakes as well.and yeah, i
know about my mistakes now, and I WILL try to improve. You seem to be a very
experienced writer, your number of stories is astonishing.And they really got
me thinking philosophically.I will need a teacher like you, to guide me. Once
again, thanks a bunch.
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Name: BlitzUltimate09
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1672799/
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Subject: My Story
Thanks for the advice, this is only my third story written, but how exactly do
I space it out, because when I typed it up it looked fine but when I submitted
my story it turned out in the format you just read, I just need advice. P.S. I
hoped you liked it but I'll get it re-formatted. One more thing, I like your
profile picture it's cute.
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Name: BlitzUltimate09
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1672799/
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Subject: My Pokemon Story
Just let you know I deleted it, and I'm going to make those changes, your
review really did help and I thank you again for telling me what I need to
fix.
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Name: TheGirlNextDoor523
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2322326/
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Subject: re: Your review to One of the Chosen
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6696950/
Oh... hee, hee, thanks for the info and review... maybe I should let my sister
check my writing-she's good with grammer of these sorts-even though I remember
SOME stuff she said... I always knew I had a problem with some grammer
lessons. Hm, anyways, thanks for the info!
And, by the way, 'When I thought I would be asleep forever, I woke up', I
meant it as her thinking that she had died. You know... the previous chapter
she went over a waterfall... and she was surprised that she was still alive.
But I guess some people don't see it from my point of view... hm.... I'll have
to work on that.
Thanks!
When cats fly,
TheGirlNextDoor523
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You have received a reply from the author, AruaPearl44, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: Return
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6703280/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2147897/
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Hey! I don't critizize you. So I think it's rude that your doing it to me.
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I'd like to take a moment to unpack this one.
Much as I love that fandom is full of female writers, it also means it's got some of the more toxic parts you get with female groups. This is usually couched in positive language, like trying to get along and accommodate others.
What you get is people having the idea all interactions are done on personal, emotional lines. Saying something that upsets you is an attack. Either it's unprovoked, in which case the person is one of those mean popular girls, or it's because of something you did to anger them first.
Criticism, in this framework, is done solely to tear the other person down. It's not even that the person believes the criticism is invented, it's that they don't believe that matters. The only reason to point out actual errors is jockeying for social power, and if there aren't errors I'd still have said there were.
It's a horrible way of thinking.
Name: Jordach
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2726051/
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Subject: re: Your review to Jordade's History
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6702975/
Well, all noobs pretty much do this, the English in England is different to
say, America, Word has the habit of telling me "long sentance" constanly which
otherwise, you could be my beta reader... ;)
- Jordach
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what the hell
Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: Leaf the Earth Guardian ( http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2600296/ )
Reply URL: http://login.fanfiction.net/review_pm.php?reviewid=120206790
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OK, first of all, there is no description of the characters whatsoever. Second
of all, stop writing mean reviews for people's stories! Now you are about to
taste your own medicine, or like I would say it, go jump off a cliff, moron!
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I think their tense here is only because they hadn't yet hit enter when typing the sentence, as sadly I've had no further reviews from them.
Name: Parabyte
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2724914/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Real Rise Of Darkrai
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6704364/
Pokemon have names. Charizard, Clefairy, they are all names. Not just what
they are called. Are the authorized books written like that? How about the
games? No.
FYI, I was referring to 'The Darkrai'. Not one of the many Darkrai, 'The
Darkrai' in the movie.
Think of it this way: You just heard The Rise Of Darkrai is coming out, what
are your first thoughts? Is Darkrai a hero, or a villian? They made him a hero
in the movie. This is him as a villian.
I know it is short. I am working on the second chapter right now. 2nd chapter
is about 2,000 words long, maybe more. And, I'm not starting a new chapter
with each scene. This is how the story is, starting off with a quickie just to
get your mind thinking about what could be coming next.
I apologize for that, it was a typo, and I missed it.
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Name: Jordach
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2726051/
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Subject: re: Your review to Jordade's History
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6702975/
actually something happens in the timeline, causing a chain reaction and
wa-bam jordades mom mutates. Also a ralts tends to be with her mother throught
the 1st evolution then no longer needs its mothers milk.
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oh god please stop talking you win okay
Name: shipperboyx
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2660856/
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Subject: re: Your review to alon in fiore
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6703272/
well no one asked you on your apinyon
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You have received a reply from the author, Oliver Jasmine, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Still In Translation
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6701464/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2588906/
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Thank you very much for the input. I didn't want to reply until I was done
revising! I editted it plenty to make things more clear, and got a friend to
beta read. A friend in college who learned grammar better than me. I'm a
senior in high school, but they never really taught that kinda stuff much '
I'm trying to portray something unusual in a more normal light... I went too
far in that direction and made my point unclear.
I'd appreciate it if you could have another look,its still pretty short and
all.
Thank you again for the review.
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Name: Skully-Chan
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2494752/
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Subject: Ty :3
Hey, thanks for reviewing my story! I relize I did make alot of mistakes and I
thank you for the advice. Ironic because your storys are really what got me
into fan fiction, even though they can be kinda morbid. Any way, ty again. :3
ttfn
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Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: YOU STUPID FAG ()
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YOUR WRITING IS TERRIBLE! i cant believe how rude you are to other people's
pokemon stories, who are clearly BETTER than yours. UR A STUPID BITCH!
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Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: too lazy 4 an account ()
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Ok, I have over a billion complaints for you, you fucking jackass. I've seen
your reviews to other fics and they're getting downright annoying. You keep
repeating the same fucking things OVER AND OVER AND OVER AGAIN! We don't
fucking care anymore! By repeating things, you are totally getting rid of the
purpose of a review. Any random idiot can copy and paste stuff together, but
reviews are supposed to come from the heart.
You've always been correcting us in grammar, and I respect that, BUT YOU'RE
FUCKING ANNOYING. GO DIR IN A HOLE ALREADY YOU BASTARD! We are not
preschoolers that don't know the difference between there and their. WE KNOW
THINGS, IDIOT. You don't need to shove into our faces that you have better
grammar. This just shows the kind of conceited bastard you are.
Anyway, after telling you all about your reviewing faults, it's about time I
tell you this story's faults.
1. It lacks emotion. So what if you have the best grammar in the world! All of
that crap doesn't matter if you cant connect with your audience. Stories
aren't meant to show people how good you are at writing, it's used to convey
the feelings of the characters. EVERYTHING LACKED EMOTION. Emotion is the most
basic and important thing you need in a fic.
2. You're always complaining that we are so unoriginal. Well wake up dude!
Your first scene is a guy waking up. HOW FUCKING CLICHE IS THAT? If you're
complaining to us about unoriginality, go fix your problems first.
3. Your writing is TOO poetic. You lost my interest within the first sentence.
It took too long for a single thing to happen and your story really didnt get
anywhere.
SO IF YOU'RE GOING TO COMPLAIN ABOUT OUR WRITING, FIX YOUR FUCKING WORK TOO!
GO DIE IN A HOLE YOU DOUCHEBAG! And if you're offended by this review, GOOD!
This is exactly how everyone else feels! You fucking bastard.
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Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: Anonymous ()
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Your stories have no sense of emotion. Your reviews towards other stories are
disrespectful and put down the writer. I have read your reviews to numerous
stories, and I believe that this is coming from your anger from other reviews.
You are also using God's name in vain, and you have no right to do that. So
get a life, jackass.
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These came within a few minutes of each other. People, learn to troll properly.
Story: Butterfly Wings
Chapter: 1. The Second Day
From: you should know- guess ()
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yes, i agree with the review below! you do hurt peoples feeings and that may
cause them to give up
IF YOU DON'T HAVE ANYTHING NICE TO SAY.. DON'T SAY IT AT ALL!
think about it- i've said it befoe but... think about why people give u bad
reviews?
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Also someone asked me to join their review guild or something.