Authors, Part 14
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farlaTitle: Not so High School
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5890600/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1121310/
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I appreciate your advice, but remember that everyone has their own way than
others, but the grammer part of it, I will keep in mind to fix up, I was never
much of a grammer person (>.> ...). My descriptions aren't in it's best
form... nor will it ever be, but the point is that this story has a lot of
dialogue because that's how I am and that's how my friend and I wanted it to
be. The descriptions can use work I admit, I can't describe people well nor
can I describe what they look like because me being who I am isn't capable of
it (if that makes any sense) and me being the lousy person I am, I can not
find a beta reader who'll actually send it back on time or have it done ASAP.
I do however take offense of your last statements of this story shouldn't be
in here. There are plenty of stories that have other characters, new ones that
aren't in the story some scenes take places in high school, future life,
alternate life or even in the middle of nowhere. (XD) The point I'm trying to
make is that everyone thinks differently, sure my characters don't carry
around pokeballs and don't battle, train or compete in contests.But the
characters are still in our story and technically they are still the
characters of whom Satoshi have created even if they are "horribly OOC" (I
know I think that's why we put OCC on the summary, we would of put major if we
could fit it! XD). I know everyone isn't perfect, I know I'm not with all my
clumsiness and mistakes I do, but what I want to do is let readers know what
goes on in my head and make it into words. Isn't that why we post stories on
here after all? I'm not trying to back talk you or yell or anything around
that area of such, just trying to let you see my point of view on things.
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Name: ScarlettShinigami
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1080626/
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Subject: Thanks for the review
Hello Farla, I'm ScarlettShinigami.
You reviewed my story Discovery and I just wanted to thank you for reviewing
my work. I also wanted to thank you for the...err...english lession you put
into that review as well. I will admit my punctution and spelling and
well...everything might be a bit off, but I do at least pride myself on my
grammar.
Your constructive critisism is greatly appriciated, but may I ask you
something? Disregarding all the spelling, english, and grammar bull*** what
did you think of my story? I know it's poorly written because when I had
finished it had been late at night, I was tired and I had thought of it spur
of the moment.
I would really like it if you said something positive about it, anything
negitive is fine too. But I have to say from your review I couldn't tell if
you were just giving critisim of flaming me...so...will you at least tell me
what you thought it?
Thank you-
ScarlettShinigami
P.S. Yes I do have issues, and I'm proud of them. My beta (Who didn't know
about the story till it was posted)read your review and said it sounded like
you where calling me an illiterate psychopath, if that was you
intention...thanks for the compliment.
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Name: David8879
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2321617/
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Subject: re: Your review to Max and The Master of Nightmares!
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5892582/
holy shit. Leave me alone, the summary is coming from a thirteen-ish year-old
boy, do you think he cares about mother and rules? and I think that I know
what it should be that I'm not a fifth grader. Also this story is not about
America and the Iraq war, I'm not complaining over anything, and it is a
fictional story, I needed some reason for Max and his mom to leave America so
I wrote that it did come over here. For all i wanted I could have wrote that
your mom is a trans-gender and murdered you, that does not mean i believe it
will ever happen,thank you very much. Jeez you can not tell me that what i am
writing is unrealistic! It is a story about POKEMON!!!! I think you left your
tampon up your Arse to long... so my computer AND I are going to ignore you
now, so please leave me be.
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Story: Left Alone
Chapter: 7. Beginning
From: David8879 ( http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2321617/ )
Reply URL: http://login.fanfiction.net/review_pm.php?reviewid=102312411
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oh yeah that's so original, copying left behind? really?
Name: Yellow-The Healer
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2232085/
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Subject: ok
Thanks for the tips!
P.S. The only reason I capitalized bidoof was because Bidoof was his name,
just like Ash's Pikachu.
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Title: The Song Remains the Same
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5892976/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2081454/
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So this is how it feels to be torn to shreds. It's refreshing, actually.
I guess I should say "thanks".
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You have received a reply from the author, WingedGirl4life, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Kanto Adventures
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5892644/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1653459/
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Thanks for the critisism. I really appreciate it. I also enjoy the fact you
took time out of your day to read the first chapter of my new story. I'm
trying to make it creative in its own special way and verbose enough so it's
equally interesting and mind stretching. I want the reader to not just
understand that someone is talking, but also to see what's happening, feel it,
even taste it. Yes, said is a good word to use, but also you don't want
mediocracy.
Yes, the starter is shiny. Yes, many writers use that, but did you ever stop
to consider that shiny is unique and special? Aren't stories also supposed to
be unique and special? Doesn't that mean that combining those two elements
also makes the story even more unique and special? It may be overdone, but
isn't writing supposed to be something unusual, creative, and unique to the
writer themself? I'm trying to write an intriguing story.
The title is something currently in work. I know it's not creative, but due
to a lack of flowing creative juices through my brain, I'm settling with
something simple for now. The statistics you gave me were quite astonishing. I
surely did not realize someone would actually count up the number of times a
certain word was used in a title. I don't have that leisure time. Good for you
though.
You did give me several very helpful tips. I thank you for them in your
grammer section(s). One thing that bothers me is about capitalizin. "pokemon".
Yes, you don't capitalize animal names, but if you get into biology, genus
names ARE capitalized. Since a Squirtle or a Growlithe isn't an individual,
but a group name for individual species, Squirtle would be like the genus.
Just like Butch is the name of your dog from the genus Canis, Blaster is a
pokemon called Squirtle.
Once again, thank you for your review. I shall take some of your words to
heart in hopes of fixing my grammer mistakes and such, but I also hope you
will take someof mine to heart as well.
~Wingz~
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That bold bit pretty much sums up everything wrong about the current YAY SUES ARE AWESOMESAUCE going around.
Unique does not mean interesting. Moreover, a sue getting standard sue shit is not unique, the hate is because they're rehashing the same tiny handful of ideas.
The fact people seriously think handing their character random bling makes for interesting writing is why everyone else attacks the mindset behind the character just as viciously as the result.
Name: ProxyxPyro
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2076746/
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Subject: re: Your review to Heart of Gold and a Soul of Silver
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5889943/
Next time you review someone's story, it might be wise to not to include "I
would hate this less". If you hate, don't read it.
But, now to your review. It's been a while since I last wrote something, and
I'm sorry if you don't like the whole Test idea, or the fact I'm using Italian
in naming my Pokemon (I capitalize it because my Word does), which I actually
do in the game.
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Title: Jaykob's Pokemon Adventure
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5889558/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2295925/
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Thank you so much for extreamly detailed review. I was in fact using this
story as a more of a mistake haven. I wanted to rise opions from people in
order to further better my own writing. I'm glad you ran into my story. Now
before I write more chapters to it I think I will go about fixing and editing
it. Thank you so much and please also take into mind that. This was more of a
test story. I would never try to get actual publicity to my stories from a
Pokemon fan-fiction. As you have so nicely made the point, they are just way
to over done. I do hope how ever that I story I will take into further
consideration for an original idea will be much better than what I have posted
here.
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Name: .headphone frenzy
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1676763/
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Subject: re: Your review to Pitch
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5875981/
Sorry.
I really needed to ramble, and when I uploaded it, it sounded cool. Sorry that
it's really confusing and/or ridiculous. (My brain shuts down at 3/4 in the
morning, so it kind of makes up whatever. Not to mention this was un-beta'd.)
(I hope it isn't too bad.) D;
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Name: SukottoDeragon
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2320252/
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Subject: A reply to your review (not to worry, I don't have
ego-raging-trolling behavious or anything xD)
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5890711/
The first really good review I get is from http://www.Fanfiction.net! I knew putting the story up here was a good idea! You see, I have this story up in other sites and I don't recieve really good reviews (I mean I do get a bunch of "COOL!" "Awesome" "Touching dude..." and other stuff) but not real reviews like this so, Thanks!
now on to the reply:
I totally agree on that, I won't do that 2 times. (lol)
There is a reason I capitalize but it is somewhat silly, generally I capitalize Pokémon because they are created by someone else and I treat then all as names, that is just how I see it. I bet there are many other reasons why people capitalize Pokémon, I actually think the both ways are correct but I shall take the capitalization into consideration although I don't think that I will change my mind with it.
Okay. And about the -'s I was taught to use them instead of "'s. use the "'s when the character is thinking or quoting someone else. and in third person I generally use the "'s as a flash back, it's different for first person writing though.
I'm not sure what you mean with that question... Anyway, if I think I know what you mean, that was one of the things I was concerned about entering my fanfic in http://www.fanfiction.net. Mainly the problem a bit for me was that I'm not sure if both the protagonists in my story have to be created characters, I was kind of confused about that matter. Kevin is one of the two protagonists here, Buizel is the other protagonist here. (hence the title) Now about Kevin, I made him LOOK LIKE an insecure whiner at first instance (in fact he is a bit of a whiner in reality... I mean fictionality, haha?) Anyway, the reason he doesn't really know about how good the people think he is it's mostly because he really doesn't know. He spends more time with his Pokémon than he actually does training them and he spends way less time playing guitar for people, you can actually see that Kevin is somewhat happier to play to his Pokémon rather than playing for people for some "strange" reason.
and oh yeah, I think the fight was lame too. I'm usually not that good making fights because when I write them down they tend to freeze instead of being a fully continued battle as it should, it's pretty hard to describe as I picture Pokémon battles without all of the clitche stuff (also known as animation tricks and/or slacking)
Thanks again so much for the review! I look foward to your next review (if you want too)
Best regards
~Scott (also known as Sukotto)
I'm not sure if I really make my point here
You have received a reply from the author, Hayleartpokeluv, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Family Ties
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5892875/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2145674/
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Okay dude I've got no idea what you're talking about since I haven't bothered
to do anything with this story in months, I was bad at dialogue then okay? So
you can pretty much criticize my grammar as much as you want on this one since
it was a long time ago when I first wrote it. It's like a pokemon journey, you
can't judge a person by how they were in the past and you have to move on and
wait to see how the person's improved, not that I'm saying I'm perfect but
I'll be glad to follow your advice for my current stories so if you want to
find out how I'm doing read one of the more recent ones I have posted and
judge THAT I could use it but this doesn't help since I wrote it a while ago
if you check the date
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You have received a reply from the author, Miloflygon, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: HalfBreed
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5895292/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1656632/
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Oh piss off, bitch! I don't give a damn about you, or your goddamn rules, so
shut the fuck up.
I didn't write this for you whiney little assholes to spout a bunch of grammar
and spelling shit at me; I wrote this because I'm an author, and because I
KNOW my friends enjoy reading what I write, as I enjoy reading what they
write.
I don't need some punk-ass little whore like you all up bitchin' in my face
cause you're a fucking prick that can't STAND seeing people do things wrong.
The world doesn't give a damn either. All people ever care about is filthy
little hoes and sluts letting them get a good look at their pussies.
So fuck off. Nobody here gives a rat's ass about rules. Just face the goddamn
facts already, cocksucker.
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I think people have officially gone insane now.
Name: Dragonrager
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2273683/
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Subject: re: Your review to Legends Awakened
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5893505/
Hi, thank you so much for your review. I really appreciate all the time you've
put in correcting my grammar! Hopefully some of the things you didn't
understand will be explained later (like the molten concrete and the pokemon
sending-in order)
Thank you for reading and caring enough to comment.
Dragonrager
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Name: so-they-say
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2024630/
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Subject: That Little Seal Icon Is Deceptive
Um, okay then. I appreciate your time for writing me a review. I respect your
personal opinions, and your brutal honesty, which was really informative...
and such comments aren't exactly easy to come by these days. I would rather
have an honest opinion than a friendly lie.
However, I really hope you understand I wrote my fan fiction strictly for
FUN...I mean, Jesus Christ, I never expected anyone to take a story about
Pokemon so seriously. It's full of grammatical errors and other issues. But,
again, this was for fun. I don't really see why you felt the need to point out
every single flaw with the story. Browsing your profile, I would guess that
you often do these sorts of things. Have fun with that.
Oh, and thanks again for my very first intelligent criticism. At least it's
useful.
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Name: Vypor
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2320276/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Commission Chronicles: Chapter 1
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5892709/
Allow me to start off my reply that you're incredibly opinionated, and already
started the story off with a negative perspective.
As is evidenced by your wording. I see nothing useful in this review. Period.
I guess you didn't bother to read my profile statement either. Which, in the
rare case that you did, you would have seen that it said I am quote unquote,
"A self-taught writer".
This is in fact, my very first chapter, to my very first story that I ever
tried to write. DUH, there will be mistakes.
You did not fully comprehend all that went into such a thing, nor did you
bother to read the statement at the bottom expressing my own dissatisfaction
with this chapter's assembly.
While I may not be the best of writers as far as punctuation and symbolage is
concerned, which I willingly admit, I find that rant-reviews do not at all
help such things.
You did not read the story in context.
1: The stove was never said to be put INSIDE the tent, that was an incorrect
assumption on your part, and you went with it without considering whether or
not it was in fact in, or outside the tent.
2: Yes, leaking propane stoves are dangerous. However, if I'm not mistaken, I
mentioned something about sealing it off with teflon tape?
Also, I wrote this in context of pretty much what my dad would do. I've
probably been on more camping trips than you ever have, and I know plenty
about it. My dad himself 'MacGyver's' many things to work, and that sort of
leak-fix would be a very likely move. For many a camper, not just my dad.
3: I use Quotation marks AND italics to emphasize thought's from a character.
And it get's the point across nicely.
4: I did not specify that I thought camping is only setting up camp. I
emphasized that time flew when you had to "set-up camp". Also, when the sun
goes down, it does get darker. However it's still fairly light out for a bit
longer afterward.
5: Now I must ask you how many times you have camped. Cause I've heard my
share of tents-burning-up-stories. Most tents can actually burn quite well,
and it doesn't take much to start it.
6: Ever camped with a tent window open? It is possible, because most tents
have netting windows. And yes, the sun does shine through them. And yes, it
will shine in your eyes if it's turned toward the East and the sun starts
rising.
My review of your review, would be that despite you taking the time to write
it up. You left nothing helpful, and if by any chance you did, it was most
definitely not in a helpful manner. And with the wording, I would take this
only to be a disguised troll attempting to peeve me off. (Which I was not.)
I would suggest instead giving a review that actually leaves tips in a helpful
manner. "No. Goddammit" is not a phrase that emphasizes a helpful manner, and
you will never help anyone improve by doing such.
I would attempt to continue trying to reason with you, however from my
dealings with such opinionated bias in the past, I can already perceive the
futility in pursuing such. You can either choose to actually consider what I
say, or continue on your way without listening. Which is undoubtedly what you
will choose. I have yet to get a comment of this style and then have the
commenter ever actually listen to anything I say.
So while I appreciate you taking the time to try and write a review, I'm
afraid in the end, it was utterly pointless.
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Name: Omega Phoenix 000
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/861765/
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Subject: Thank you.
Thank you for the critism (Hope I spelled that right, lol.) for chapter 1 of
The Hunted (Corny title. Couldn't think of anything else though.). I was
hoping for some critism, and I will use your advice :). I was contemplating
the capitalization of pokemon and the sort, and almost settled on not to.
Seems that was a mistake. And yeah, the Its/ It's problem confuses me, but I
hope to do better with chapter 2 and higher.
Yes, chapter 1 ended rather cliched, but it was intended that way. I just
wanted to try and make the intro chapter longer than 500 words, hehe. I use
wordpad and it doesn't have a word count thing as I type, so I can only guess
how long a chapter might be. Sorry, seems a simple thank you has turned into
something more ^^;
Anyways, thank you again, and if you continue reading the fic, more critism
would be appreciated ^^.
-Omega.
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Name: Chaos0283
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1147605/
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Subject: Hey
Okay, first off I don't want your fucking review if your going to be an ass
Farla. It's a fanfic BASED on the game, i dont care what everyone else has
done, im not them. You must get some sick pleasure out of scouring the pokemon
fanfic archive and looking through fanfics just so you can type about how
terrible it is. No one want's the opinion of someone who's going to do nothing
but put them down, instead of encouraging them on what they can do, I see you
doing none of that.
Therefore, welcome to my blacklist of not ever being able to read none of my
shit again.
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I'm not sure what's better about this - the idea they think blocking me makes me unable to see their story, or the idea this is some sort of punishment.
You have received a reply from the author, Henryka, regarding the review you
posted for:
Title: Pokemon World!
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5891584/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2320679/
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This is my first story, and where are the good points? If you're going to
comment, you have to say something kind.
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Story: Flight
Chapter: 1. Default Chapter
From: Minari ()
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Your story was ridiculous!
Number one - It's too short
Number two - It's too abrupt
Number three - Makes no sense
Seriously.. no offense but this is one of the worst I have EVER read!
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Title: Moondance With the Stars
Chapter: 2
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5892419/2/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2156197/
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^-^
Hey, nice to hear from you again. I thought you were ignoring me. I'll take a
long look at all these corrections that I'm gonna make. And, yeah, the infant
thing... I'll fix that. Sorry. And, yes, that IS an emo poem. Heh heh heh...
And he doesn't know what a Pidgey is because Pokemon hasn't been downloaded
into him.
Oh, darn. I did it again.
>:)
Fweh heh heh heh...
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Story: Dämmerung
Chapter: 2. Chapter 2
From: Whateva ()
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Well well well.. if it isn't the 'flamer'! You aren't as good as I imagined-
flaming everyone's stories like that o.O... And what's with the story?? Dude,
if you want to write a story, you need to make the words simple but crisp- so
that everyone can imagine it! And half the words in the story are too
complicated! I need a dictionary in my hand if I want to understand it!! Make
a better job in your stories before you insult anyone else!
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Title: Fall of a Champion
Chapter: 2
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5891789/2/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2168568/
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Thanks a lot for your reviews! I'm going to kind of respond to both your
reviews here, because I'm lazy like that.
For Chapter 1: Thanks for pointing out those grammatical mistakes. I know
that as a reader, those can get very distracting. I'm also glad to hear that
you think it's decent
For Chapter 2: Wow... I generally don't mix up your/you're, but I see now that
I did... a lot. Guess I was typing too fast. Didn't make many changes to
Master's lunacy in the begining, because I meant for that to be exaggerated,
or perhaps even humorous. It was supposed to show how Master was slowly
turning more and more twisted by the second part. He was supposed to go from
funny to disturbing. Though, you were definately right in that he yelled a
bit too much. Too much yelling loses effect. It also makes him less
disturbing.
Anyways, changes have been made and changes will be made to the following two
chapters (which aren't up yet). I'm thinking that Ch 3 will be Monday if
you're still interested in the story. Once again, thanks!
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