NaRe, Day Eighteen
Dec. 18th, 2009 10:48 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
farlaSo FFN finally readjusted my review numbers back down to 960. Given that if you go back to the first of these and check, only three of the mega post are missing, that's a bit weird. I'll have to go through and see if the short spellcheck/proper grammar/paragraphing ones are gone, as I tended to report the really awful ones and it'd be nice to have some confirmation they actually are deleting stuff for breaking the rules.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588335/1/Two_worlds_collide
Capitalize your title properly.
Half of your chapter should not be made up of inane author's notes where you chat with very boring people who you've given the names of canon characters.
Nor is what little of this is an actual story actually long enough for a chapter. Use more narration, so your story is more than "Suddenly, this happened! People talked a bit. Another thing happened!"
You also need some sort of plot. Your self-insert going "Hey, this is awesome!" in response to anime (yes, it has only one a and yes, shouldn't be capitalized) characters showing up and then telling them everything is not a plot, nor it is good writing.
Continuing on things that shouldn't be capitalized, you wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
And also, don't say sweatdropped.
And don't put author's notes in a story.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588504/1/Reality_Bites
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category.
Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it."
I don't care how much time you spent memorizing meaningless factoids, casting for movies will not magically change to be about who can remember what pikachu's pokedex number is and if you can use poison powder on a grass type instead of who is an appropriate actor.
And don't use scene breaks to say "And now the story is happening over here". That belongs in narration.
When used in place of a name, it's written Mom, not mom. It's only in constructions like my/her/the mom that it's written as such.
Speaking of names, they shouldn't sound like you pulled them out of a hat.
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
Other things that are meaningless for a casting call include battling ability and frankly anything else other than looks and acting ability.
Do not use more than one exclamation point.
""The 15th... Yes! We're skipping tuition!" Philip yelled, suddenly very happy."
Is generally the money you pay for the class, not the class itself. Best to pick words carefully.
Anyway, your dialogue is long and meaningless and should really be hacked down to the point it's actually serving the story, instead of the story being a vehicle to dispense more inanity.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588914/1/Jennys_Journey
There are about three thousand stories just on this site in this category with "pokemon" in their title. There are about two hundred and fifty "chronicles", more if you include misspellings, and god knows how many "Character Name"'s whatever. There are almost four hundred with "legend". There are six hundred and fifty with "journey", six hundred with "story", two hundred with "quest", and almost seven hundred with "adventure". "Kanto" shows up over a hundred times, as does "Johto", "Hoenn", and"Sinnoh".
What I'm getting at here is that you want to choose an original title that has to do with your story in particular, not something that indicates it's yet another story about a pokemon trainer.
Write out numbers with letters.
"the trunk of their car, one would find: a cooler containing food for their journey and four bags carrying the family's personal belongings that they felt they might need for the trip. The reason for this trip is simple. The Humphrey family was moving to Pallet Town in order to reunite with their old friends - the Oaks and the Ketchums"
Okay, there's a different between a trip and moving. Moving generally moving all the things you own, which by and large will not fit into a suitcase per person. See, there are things like "dishes" and "furniture" and "photo albums" and "books" which generally go in "boxes".
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
"Most trainers start their journeys at the age of 10, like Jenny. However, Dan is getting a late start on his journey. This is not a decision that he made on his own. If anything, it was his parents that decided he would wait until Jenny was old enough to start her journey. Dan readily agreed due to the fact that, at that time, the Humphreys lived near Saffron City - which meant that Dan would be unable to protect Jenny from their rich and inconsiderate neighbors if he started his journey before she was old enough to start her own."
A rarer explanation which is not any better than the more common sort.
For one thing, his parents aren't dead, so he really shouldn't be in the position of having to make major sacrifices for his younger sister at age ten. It's his parent's job to take care of her.
For another, if the kids are his age, then they'd be gone. If they're younger than him, then he's beating up on younger kids. If they're significantly older than him, then they should be harassing him rather than his sister, and they'll have pokemon to back them up as if being several years older wasn't enough. And you've said he not only didn't journey, he didn't get a pokemon Because somehow *not* getting a pokemon would make protecting her easier.
Then there's that people being "rich and inconsiderate" is not actually something you need your big brother to follow you around and protect you from. If these are just snooty adults then Jenny can learn to deal like the rest of the human race at the idea someone doesn't think you're actually that special. If they're kids, then being rich and inconsiderate shouldn't even register on the normal range of kids being jerks. I'm not even quite sure what it constitutes. "Dan! Paul was inconsiderately acting like everyone could afford a brand new car every year at me!" I mean, what the hell are you even trying to say here? How does being rich make your inconsiderateness somehow that much different?
And ten year olds generally don't have decent memories of who they played with in a place they left at age five.
Oh, yeah, and this is far too short for a chapter.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588952/1/A_Kiss_At_Christmas
"She'd go with, but, now that she was back home, she wasn't going anywhere in hopes to have her first white Christmas."
Didn't it pretty reliably snow around Christmas in the various years she was traveling? It's not like they were journeying in the tropics the whole time. I can understand someone who's been in a snowless area for a while feeling this way, but she wasn't. The only distinction is that the snow's going to be in her hometown assuming it snows at all, which, if she's claiming to never have a white Christmas, it must generally not, which then gets into why her sisters left and she stayed under the assumption it would be snowing. Unless there was just a weather report and they bought tickets at the last minute, and then we're getting into such facts as while cold and winter might do things to skin, snow is not some magical third entity that does something completely different than the other two, so if her sisters were going to leave they'd have just left because it was winter a good while ago and then Misty wouldn't have had incentive not to go with given that it normally doesn't snow apparently and in conclusion you really didn't think this through, did you?
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category.
Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it."
...it's weird to call someone you know around Christmas? Oh, romance fic, why must you always be about how crazy aliens act?
Crazy, stupid aliens. If Misty's in enough trouble she can't come to the phone and Togepi's relaying a message, the correct response is not "let's trek up there!" it's "call the police".
Especially, aliens, if you're so worried about her wellbeing you're willing to break down a door. If you're certain waiting to see if she'll answer is too long, she probably could have used that help hours ago, such as if you called the police who actually live in the area and are able to respond quickly, as well as calling in turn an ambulance if something's really wrong.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5589065/1/Not_so_legendary
Capitalize your title properly.
"I wrote this as a response to the severe lack of humorous stories concerning legendaries. So staple your sides and hold on to your ass, because here we go!"
I have this great idea you could try for fixing that problem. It's called reading the stories people post. I assure you, there are many unfunny humor stories about OOC legendaries for your enjoyment.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5589170/1/Pokecaptor_Brendan
I'm not entirely sure why it annoys me that these crossovers seem to generally involve Sakura being supplanted by a male character, but god, it really does.
Don't put author's notes in your story.
No, seriously, don't.
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
"This was partly because during his adventure, he promised to be enrolled in the new Mamoru Academy, a school that teaches self-defense for those who don't have Pokémon to protect them or just in case the Trainer's Pokémon are unable to help him/her."
Okay, so let's run down everything wrong with this.
For one thing, you don't need a whole school for that. You may not have noticed this, but we generally don't call things "schools" and enroll kids in them full time when they just teach something like karate.
For another, this is a world with fire breathing dragons. Self defense is running the other way.
For a third, we already know what the pokemon world's way of dealing with it: don't go in tall grass or anywhere else with wild pokemon until you get a pokemon of your own. That is how they handle it.
For a fourth, even if we accept that there are a reasonable number of times a kid will be facing a wild pokemon that it's possible for a human to handle so there is some sort of time that non-trainers will benefit from this information at all, there is no such point where something that can take out a pokemon league winner's pokemon will be stopped by a self-defense class lesson.
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category.
Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it."
"Brendan Avilon"
...so I see this is a Pokemon/Cardcaptors crossover, not a Pokemon/Card Captor Sakura one.
"(he's a White Haired Pretty Boy; search that term at ) "
I would honestly stop reading this here if I wasn't curious just how much of a train wreak this will end up being.
""You take me for a Y-A-O-I?!!", Brendan gasped in shock."
I see I was not disappointed in your ability to disappoint, at least. And you've named his male friend Yuri just for that extra touch of stupidity in this exchange.
"On th cover was a feline-like Arcanine (A/N: I don't know what Pokémon resembles a 'real life' lion)"
Just a thought, but possibly one of the multiple cat pokemon?
Anyway, you're basically running through the first episode if it was stripped of everything good about it, so I'll be stopping here.
Here's the thing. Pokemon and CCS have a large degree of overlap. Possibly that had something to do with why you thought this would be a good idea, but that's not actually how it works. You've just made them redundant. You've got magical animals you defeat with other magical animals and then capture in round balls to use to defeat more magical animals. And you've got magical spirits (that sometimes look like magical animals) you defeat with other magical spirits and then capture in cards to use to defeat more magical spirits. Having a pokemon trainer also catching cards doesn't add anything, and the redundancy makes the whole concept fall apart (why would what Clow did be a big deal, what's special about magic spirits in a world already overflowing with magic animals) and crucially, one of the core issues Sakura had to deal with and which made the series interesting was that she was often facing them down alone or without appropriate cards, does not apply here because he's starting off with the aforementioned magical animals, not as a normal human kid.
If you want to cross them over, you're going to have to actually combine the worlds (as in, making a world like the pokemon one with cards in place of pokemon, or redoing CCS with pokemon in place of cards) not just take a pokemon trainer and say he found the cards.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588335/1/Two_worlds_collide
Capitalize your title properly.
Half of your chapter should not be made up of inane author's notes where you chat with very boring people who you've given the names of canon characters.
Nor is what little of this is an actual story actually long enough for a chapter. Use more narration, so your story is more than "Suddenly, this happened! People talked a bit. Another thing happened!"
You also need some sort of plot. Your self-insert going "Hey, this is awesome!" in response to anime (yes, it has only one a and yes, shouldn't be capitalized) characters showing up and then telling them everything is not a plot, nor it is good writing.
Continuing on things that shouldn't be capitalized, you wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
And also, don't say sweatdropped.
And don't put author's notes in a story.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588504/1/Reality_Bites
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category.
Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it."
I don't care how much time you spent memorizing meaningless factoids, casting for movies will not magically change to be about who can remember what pikachu's pokedex number is and if you can use poison powder on a grass type instead of who is an appropriate actor.
And don't use scene breaks to say "And now the story is happening over here". That belongs in narration.
When used in place of a name, it's written Mom, not mom. It's only in constructions like my/her/the mom that it's written as such.
Speaking of names, they shouldn't sound like you pulled them out of a hat.
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
Other things that are meaningless for a casting call include battling ability and frankly anything else other than looks and acting ability.
Do not use more than one exclamation point.
""The 15th... Yes! We're skipping tuition!" Philip yelled, suddenly very happy."
Is generally the money you pay for the class, not the class itself. Best to pick words carefully.
Anyway, your dialogue is long and meaningless and should really be hacked down to the point it's actually serving the story, instead of the story being a vehicle to dispense more inanity.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588914/1/Jennys_Journey
There are about three thousand stories just on this site in this category with "pokemon" in their title. There are about two hundred and fifty "chronicles", more if you include misspellings, and god knows how many "Character Name"'s whatever. There are almost four hundred with "legend". There are six hundred and fifty with "journey", six hundred with "story", two hundred with "quest", and almost seven hundred with "adventure". "Kanto" shows up over a hundred times, as does "Johto", "Hoenn", and"Sinnoh".
What I'm getting at here is that you want to choose an original title that has to do with your story in particular, not something that indicates it's yet another story about a pokemon trainer.
Write out numbers with letters.
"the trunk of their car, one would find: a cooler containing food for their journey and four bags carrying the family's personal belongings that they felt they might need for the trip. The reason for this trip is simple. The Humphrey family was moving to Pallet Town in order to reunite with their old friends - the Oaks and the Ketchums"
Okay, there's a different between a trip and moving. Moving generally moving all the things you own, which by and large will not fit into a suitcase per person. See, there are things like "dishes" and "furniture" and "photo albums" and "books" which generally go in "boxes".
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
"Most trainers start their journeys at the age of 10, like Jenny. However, Dan is getting a late start on his journey. This is not a decision that he made on his own. If anything, it was his parents that decided he would wait until Jenny was old enough to start her journey. Dan readily agreed due to the fact that, at that time, the Humphreys lived near Saffron City - which meant that Dan would be unable to protect Jenny from their rich and inconsiderate neighbors if he started his journey before she was old enough to start her own."
A rarer explanation which is not any better than the more common sort.
For one thing, his parents aren't dead, so he really shouldn't be in the position of having to make major sacrifices for his younger sister at age ten. It's his parent's job to take care of her.
For another, if the kids are his age, then they'd be gone. If they're younger than him, then he's beating up on younger kids. If they're significantly older than him, then they should be harassing him rather than his sister, and they'll have pokemon to back them up as if being several years older wasn't enough. And you've said he not only didn't journey, he didn't get a pokemon Because somehow *not* getting a pokemon would make protecting her easier.
Then there's that people being "rich and inconsiderate" is not actually something you need your big brother to follow you around and protect you from. If these are just snooty adults then Jenny can learn to deal like the rest of the human race at the idea someone doesn't think you're actually that special. If they're kids, then being rich and inconsiderate shouldn't even register on the normal range of kids being jerks. I'm not even quite sure what it constitutes. "Dan! Paul was inconsiderately acting like everyone could afford a brand new car every year at me!" I mean, what the hell are you even trying to say here? How does being rich make your inconsiderateness somehow that much different?
And ten year olds generally don't have decent memories of who they played with in a place they left at age five.
Oh, yeah, and this is far too short for a chapter.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5588952/1/A_Kiss_At_Christmas
"She'd go with, but, now that she was back home, she wasn't going anywhere in hopes to have her first white Christmas."
Didn't it pretty reliably snow around Christmas in the various years she was traveling? It's not like they were journeying in the tropics the whole time. I can understand someone who's been in a snowless area for a while feeling this way, but she wasn't. The only distinction is that the snow's going to be in her hometown assuming it snows at all, which, if she's claiming to never have a white Christmas, it must generally not, which then gets into why her sisters left and she stayed under the assumption it would be snowing. Unless there was just a weather report and they bought tickets at the last minute, and then we're getting into such facts as while cold and winter might do things to skin, snow is not some magical third entity that does something completely different than the other two, so if her sisters were going to leave they'd have just left because it was winter a good while ago and then Misty wouldn't have had incentive not to go with given that it normally doesn't snow apparently and in conclusion you really didn't think this through, did you?
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category.
Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it."
...it's weird to call someone you know around Christmas? Oh, romance fic, why must you always be about how crazy aliens act?
Crazy, stupid aliens. If Misty's in enough trouble she can't come to the phone and Togepi's relaying a message, the correct response is not "let's trek up there!" it's "call the police".
Especially, aliens, if you're so worried about her wellbeing you're willing to break down a door. If you're certain waiting to see if she'll answer is too long, she probably could have used that help hours ago, such as if you called the police who actually live in the area and are able to respond quickly, as well as calling in turn an ambulance if something's really wrong.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5589065/1/Not_so_legendary
Capitalize your title properly.
"I wrote this as a response to the severe lack of humorous stories concerning legendaries. So staple your sides and hold on to your ass, because here we go!"
I have this great idea you could try for fixing that problem. It's called reading the stories people post. I assure you, there are many unfunny humor stories about OOC legendaries for your enjoyment.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5589170/1/Pokecaptor_Brendan
I'm not entirely sure why it annoys me that these crossovers seem to generally involve Sakura being supplanted by a male character, but god, it really does.
Don't put author's notes in your story.
No, seriously, don't.
You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer.
"This was partly because during his adventure, he promised to be enrolled in the new Mamoru Academy, a school that teaches self-defense for those who don't have Pokémon to protect them or just in case the Trainer's Pokémon are unable to help him/her."
Okay, so let's run down everything wrong with this.
For one thing, you don't need a whole school for that. You may not have noticed this, but we generally don't call things "schools" and enroll kids in them full time when they just teach something like karate.
For another, this is a world with fire breathing dragons. Self defense is running the other way.
For a third, we already know what the pokemon world's way of dealing with it: don't go in tall grass or anywhere else with wild pokemon until you get a pokemon of your own. That is how they handle it.
For a fourth, even if we accept that there are a reasonable number of times a kid will be facing a wild pokemon that it's possible for a human to handle so there is some sort of time that non-trainers will benefit from this information at all, there is no such point where something that can take out a pokemon league winner's pokemon will be stopped by a self-defense class lesson.
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category.
Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it."
"Brendan Avilon"
...so I see this is a Pokemon/Cardcaptors crossover, not a Pokemon/Card Captor Sakura one.
"(he's a White Haired Pretty Boy; search that term at ) "
I would honestly stop reading this here if I wasn't curious just how much of a train wreak this will end up being.
""You take me for a Y-A-O-I?!!", Brendan gasped in shock."
I see I was not disappointed in your ability to disappoint, at least. And you've named his male friend Yuri just for that extra touch of stupidity in this exchange.
"On th cover was a feline-like Arcanine (A/N: I don't know what Pokémon resembles a 'real life' lion)"
Just a thought, but possibly one of the multiple cat pokemon?
Anyway, you're basically running through the first episode if it was stripped of everything good about it, so I'll be stopping here.
Here's the thing. Pokemon and CCS have a large degree of overlap. Possibly that had something to do with why you thought this would be a good idea, but that's not actually how it works. You've just made them redundant. You've got magical animals you defeat with other magical animals and then capture in round balls to use to defeat more magical animals. And you've got magical spirits (that sometimes look like magical animals) you defeat with other magical spirits and then capture in cards to use to defeat more magical spirits. Having a pokemon trainer also catching cards doesn't add anything, and the redundancy makes the whole concept fall apart (why would what Clow did be a big deal, what's special about magic spirits in a world already overflowing with magic animals) and crucially, one of the core issues Sakura had to deal with and which made the series interesting was that she was often facing them down alone or without appropriate cards, does not apply here because he's starting off with the aforementioned magical animals, not as a normal human kid.
If you want to cross them over, you're going to have to actually combine the worlds (as in, making a world like the pokemon one with cards in place of pokemon, or redoing CCS with pokemon in place of cards) not just take a pokemon trainer and say he found the cards.
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Date: 2009-12-19 05:21 pm (UTC)O-Okay, I'll bite: how in the world are you able to subject yourself to this kind of torture without losing your sanity?
"You take me for a Y-A-O-I?!!", Brendan gasped in shock."
what is this i don't even
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Date: 2009-12-19 07:38 pm (UTC)