Which Yet Survive

[farla]

http://archiveofourown.org/works/88373

I love the world you made for Jade. It fits so well, nuclear for her technology, and the bombed out town works because only Jade would find it just beautiful and not threatening, while at the same time it does have more than enough scariness for tension, and it makes for a far more vivid backdrop than normal. The way you write does a good job of balancing both Dave and Jade's views of the place at once, I felt like I could see the ways they each saw it.

shows him all the things she's drawn out already
I like your phrasing for the most part, but this confused me. I don't think drawn works as a synonym for found, which I think is what you meant here based on context. Or possibly that she's seen it through a telescope or something? Like I said, confused.

The suspense works really well. Especially with Dave searching through a nuclear ghost town, since radioactivity, more than anything, has such a sense of futility tied to it, and deserts without water are a close second. I wasn't sure if he'd end up finding her trapped somewhere and rescuing her or wander around until he dropped dead of thirst.

And I liked that it isn't simply a matter of him rescuing her in the end, but both being able to fight the monsters.

The final ending did a great job of tying everything up - I almost laughed out loud, to think she'd told him all this at the beginning, complete with a warning not to be worried, and despite that he spends the whole fic running around frantically trying to find her.