Contradiction
Mar. 8th, 2005 07:00 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
farla::sigh:: The Last Drop isn't shaping up too well. When I decided to review it, I'd only read the first chapter, back when it was first posted, and I really did think it sounded like a decent concept. Perhaps if I'd seen the second chapter before I started reviewing (OMG! Lookit what I get!) (and the lifetime pass thing. Just no.) I might have decided against it.
....in the most recent chapter she nicknames the castform 'Morf'. (“What do you think of ‘Morf’? You morph with the weather, and it’s with an ‘f’ instead of ‘ph’ so it’s more of a name than a word.” Because of course the spelling of a name is totally going to matter when it's said out loud.) Then the author starts alternating 'Morf' and 'Castform' as names. When a reviewer points out this out, she replies by saying it's intentional, so people will know who Morf is.
::headdesk::
Not even going into the issue of there only being one pokemon and the reader hearing the whole conversation, is writing 'the castform' really that complex of a concept?
She's honestly not a bad writer mechanically but...ow, her plot and reasoning are just painful.
Oh well. Anyway, I'm actually quite happy at the reviews I got for Ice. I'm a bit dismayed that some people didn't seem to understand why the trainer had trouble with money, though - I admit I didn't really go into much but I figured it wouldn't be too hard to understand. I suppose a full explanation would be that normal trainers start out with a sizable sum of money, which the child doesn't. Normal trainers can also eat and heal their pokemon for free at pokemon centers, which the child can't. So the child's travels cost a great deal more than a normal trainer's would.
Anonymous Yammer gave me a wonderfully good review and I feel very, very guilty for not changing my commas as they suggested (And they gave such a wonderful explanation of semicolons...). Sadly the oddly placed commas were deliberate. I feel guilty about saying that as well, since I know how much it irritates me when someone claims mistakes are intentional and that it's their style. But I really can't change them because they're meant to be breaking up the sentences that way. Especially the semicolon - that's meant to be read as two conjoined sentences. (I did fix the actual errors as promptly as I could...and yes, those of you who check will notice that the text is still cut off.)
....in the most recent chapter she nicknames the castform 'Morf'. (“What do you think of ‘Morf’? You morph with the weather, and it’s with an ‘f’ instead of ‘ph’ so it’s more of a name than a word.” Because of course the spelling of a name is totally going to matter when it's said out loud.) Then the author starts alternating 'Morf' and 'Castform' as names. When a reviewer points out this out, she replies by saying it's intentional, so people will know who Morf is.
::headdesk::
Not even going into the issue of there only being one pokemon and the reader hearing the whole conversation, is writing 'the castform' really that complex of a concept?
She's honestly not a bad writer mechanically but...ow, her plot and reasoning are just painful.
Oh well. Anyway, I'm actually quite happy at the reviews I got for Ice. I'm a bit dismayed that some people didn't seem to understand why the trainer had trouble with money, though - I admit I didn't really go into much but I figured it wouldn't be too hard to understand. I suppose a full explanation would be that normal trainers start out with a sizable sum of money, which the child doesn't. Normal trainers can also eat and heal their pokemon for free at pokemon centers, which the child can't. So the child's travels cost a great deal more than a normal trainer's would.
Anonymous Yammer gave me a wonderfully good review and I feel very, very guilty for not changing my commas as they suggested (And they gave such a wonderful explanation of semicolons...). Sadly the oddly placed commas were deliberate. I feel guilty about saying that as well, since I know how much it irritates me when someone claims mistakes are intentional and that it's their style. But I really can't change them because they're meant to be breaking up the sentences that way. Especially the semicolon - that's meant to be read as two conjoined sentences. (I did fix the actual errors as promptly as I could...and yes, those of you who check will notice that the text is still cut off.)
