It's first person. She could be making her whole narrative up for all we know. And the yells are put there as a part of her narrative and not as a direct quote.
The humans were definitely aiming the guns at the Absol when they shot her mate, that's clear, whether they were aiming to try to kill them all or just shoot at them mainly to scare them off but also killing a few. But meh, I keep finding the original story more and more rushed and slapped together.
The reason I did make her hate humans is that I like writing biased. I find it interesting. I'm also currently working on rewriting it completely, improving on these things.
I may not agree with everything you say, but the reason I'm reading your journal in the first place is that I learn from it. I love reading through your reviews of other fics, just to see the points you bring up. Sure, I don't agree with them all, but all is taken into consideration and weighed, I think about whether I've done something similar and how to fix it, and it all helps. Basically, don't take it like I'm just coming here to stand up for my fic and say you're wrong.
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Date: 2004-10-14 09:24 pm (UTC)The humans were definitely aiming the guns at the Absol when they shot her mate, that's clear, whether they were aiming to try to kill them all or just shoot at them mainly to scare them off but also killing a few. But meh, I keep finding the original story more and more rushed and slapped together.
The reason I did make her hate humans is that I like writing biased. I find it interesting. I'm also currently working on rewriting it completely, improving on these things.
I may not agree with everything you say, but the reason I'm reading your journal in the first place is that I learn from it. I love reading through your reviews of other fics, just to see the points you bring up. Sure, I don't agree with them all, but all is taken into consideration and weighed, I think about whether I've done something similar and how to fix it, and it all helps. Basically, don't take it like I'm just coming here to stand up for my fic and say you're wrong.