PR rewrite
Dec. 9th, 2007 01:10 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
farlaLooking over Ch16, it's just a mess. I get the impression I was rushing, because there's a lot of jumping about and really poor setup. About half the scenes are fleshed out properly, and the others are just short expositionary pieces.
Initially I thought this was bad but it gives me more room to work. I just have to check over the next chapter to see what absolutely needs to be included this chapter.
Initially I thought this was bad but it gives me more room to work. I just have to check over the next chapter to see what absolutely needs to be included this chapter.
