Authors, Part Four
Dec. 11th, 2009 10:29 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
farlaOkay, going to post these with minimum formatting because that's part of what slows these down.
You have received a reply from the author, Mystik Shadows, regarding the review you posted for:
Title: Sauntering Shadows
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5555126/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1940047/
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I have had enough of you! You know how many good fanfcitiosn you've
practically flamed? I know you'd say that it's constructiv critism, but
honestly, I can't believe how nasty you're being!
And, I know that I've got quite a few errors, but I think you could at least
give me a break.
And you know what else? You obiously think that I did pick up a thesaurus,
put maybe you should start trying to realize that soem people have
VOCABULARYS. Ever heard of one?
You could at leats just give a nice, simple review and leave it t that, not
just point out all the errors! Well, I don't mind the fact that you did point
them out, but you didn't have to be so severe. I don't suppose any of your
fics are any better.
Good fanfcitiosn really does sum it up nicely.
Name: evee11
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2144467/
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Subject: SLOW DOWN
WHAT ARE YOU, MY TEACHER?!!! IF YOU READ MY PROFILE, I'M ELEVEN YEARS OLD!
SO WHAT IF THE WERE MISTAKES. I LOVE TO WRITE AND EVERYONE AT SCHOOL SAYS I'M
GREAT AT IT, BUT I'M NO PROFESSIONAL. JEEZ. I MEAN, GIVE ME A BREAK! I'M
TRYING THE BEST I CAN. WHAT IF SOMEONE REVIEWED YOUR STORY LISTED ALL OF YOUR
MISTAKES? EVERYONE MAKES MISTAKES. YOU DON'T HAVE TO BE A MEAN. YOU KNOW,
THAT REVIEW WILL BE POSTED EVERYTIME SOMEONE REVIEWS. WHAT IF THEY READ YOUR
REVIEW AND START TO LIST ALL OF MY MISTAKES? I THINK I CAN DELETE REVIEWS,
BUT, I'M GOING TO KEEP YOURS, EVEN THOUGH IT WAS A LITTLE MEAN.
In the interests of fairness their second PM was quite sane.
Name: megachile
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1813756/
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Subject: re: Your review to Drawing Love
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5555605/
okay, about the thoughts and all that, you might be right, however, my
grammar sucks, cause i DONT live in an english speaking country and i'm NOT
very good in writting english, in Chile, the language is spanish, and english
is looked like something only gifted people know, so why don't you check
before flaming or whatever and if you read my profile, it warns it!, and
instead of saying boring, tiresome in a way that makes me feel like i'm some
sort of retarded bastard, why don't you TRY to put it in a nicer way, at
least, giving some hope of improvment. THANK YOU!
As a side note, their profile also claims that they're seventeen. So yeah.
Name: J.Whitnee
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1690703/
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Subject: re: Your review to Cyber Entity
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5553095/
Whoa. Girl, what did you eat? Sugar cubes mixed in with dog shit? Push it
down on the ranting on my friend here. Sure, you are trying to say what she
did wrong, but that can easily be done without you swearing and being a total
moron. Ok, first, what is wrong with oc fics? No, it is not like "trying to
complete a hundred-piece puzzle by taking fifty of the pieces from fifty other
puzzles". No. Your opinion, fine respected, but never tell others how to run
their fic. It's theirs, buddy, and if you don't like it then screw off.
And no. OC fics are not like that. NO they do not make you end up with a
mess.
NO.
Second, Regular pokemon opening games are so cliche, and as you may go "oh
its like that in every single game", I go, "BECAUSE it's like that in every
single game that i am GLAD she did not start like it".
Your quote:
"Hmph, this will be great, though I do feel sorry for the person that will
get this virus first, if their family fails to admit them to a hospital within
forty-eight hours things could get uglier for that person then the rest of the
victims"
That's right! You show that corporation by infecting innocent kids who have
nothing to do with it! Next up, get back at Cindy from middle school by
sending anthrax-filled letters to random people in China, and then teach the
dog not to poop on the carpet by throwing rocks through hospital windows.
JUSTICE!
Ok, wait. there is nothing there that has said that these men are getting
back at the corporation. You don't know this story. Maybe they want to use the
corporation to kill a bunch of people? maybe they were hire by the
corporatioin so that they can kill a bunch of kids. Don't jump to conclusions,
and don't be a moron when you do.
Why am i even wasting my time on you?
Go rant someone elses fic. Make sure it's not one of my buddies. If you are
going to tell people what they did wrong, then don't rant. Tell them.
I'm honestly always bothered by the whole "what you're doing is VERY VERY WRONG AND HURTS PEOPLE so go do it to someone I don't know" concept. Further evidence I reside on the far edge of tribal dynamics.
Name: Svay
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/378664/
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Subject: Thank you for your very detailed review.
First off, I understand that I made a mistake with saline waters and with the
commas but thanks for pointing it out to me in the most sarcastic and bitchy
way possible. If you want to give "constructive criticism" then your nasty
comment "Stop picking words out of a thesaurus," really isn' necessary. The
word saline was used improperly-I GET IT. Also, as far as my grammatical and
syntex errors are concerned, you were not completely correct.
I am aware that Mew can teleport. That doesn't mean that she'll always
teleport to certain places instead of flying there. Mew flew to New Island in
the movie and in MY story she flew to the beach instead of teleporting. It
worked out with my plot better and if you have a problem with it then that is
YOU'RE PROBLEM. As far as the gender of my character, I put that in there to
further distinguish the female Mewtwo from the male Mewtwo. Therefore, there
would be something more than her green eyes or her voice to distinguish them.
If the fact that I gave her breasts affects you SO much then I'm sorry. I
didn't know you were that sensitive...or picky. Regardless, get over it.
The female Mewtwo does have a name, Alana, since her conversation was cut
short with Mew that will come later in the story. As far as the whole
helicopter situation goes, Alana destroyed the building first when she
escaped. The helicopers came afterwards because of the explosion. She didn't
go over there and destroy them after the helicopters passed overhead. She
disappeared because she didn't want to be seen because she didn't want her
existance to be known by humans. I was going to get to this in later chapters
but since it bothered you so much maybe I should make an announcement at the
end of the chapter. Last but not least, Mew was worried about Alana causing
the explosion because she did not want a repeat of what Mewtwo did when he was
born. Characters can have more than one side---it's called "depth." Just
because Mew didn't act a certain way in the movie doesn't mean that she
shouldn't be worried about a particular situation. With her being pyschic she
had a feeling that things were going to get worse with Alana and she is right.
FYI I've only made two chapters so far and I will further explain things in
the chapters to come.
If you don't like my story then don't read it. I really could care less about
your personal opinions on what you THINK I should do and how I should write. I
will add more chapters and you're rather rude critiques really aren't needed.
I'm sure you're going to write me back some nasty email about what I've said
so know this: don't wast your time.By the way, if you send another review to
my story to get even I'll report you. I don't have time to argue with some
one who obviously has a bug up their ass. Write away if you wish but I'll
ignore it. I'm in college and I don't have time to study the wonderful world
of pokemon as much as you obviously do.
Among other things, this is pretty much exactly what I mean when I tell people I don't want a long review explaining how nothing is wrong. If I saw that in a fic with Mewtwo and a mewtwo it's important to give the other one a name immediately, I don't give a damn that you've picked a name.
It's also why I tend to take author responses as unreliable at best. If I explain myself, it's GEEZ I GET IT SHUT UP. But if I didn't, it'd probably be U R WRONG THE DICTIONARY SAYS.
You have received a reply from the author, Ooshii Kurai, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: The Mystery Of Me
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5560782/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/84968/
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Wow. Just wow.
Did you seriously just copy and paste the bottom half of that review from
your other reviews? What the crap?
You sound so petty and ignorant in your review that I actually feel
embarrassed for you. Do you know what a grammar nazi is? It isn't a term of
endearment, honey.
I'm sure you are a great writer, and maybe you mean well. But it doesn't come
across. Don't become a critic. Unless you like people not liking you.
Think of this way. How often do you listen to advice from someone who starts
off the conversation with, "God what were you thinking?"
There is a nice way to tell someone that their story needs work. If you try
being nice, maybe your reviews will actually be listened to, praised even.
Until then, people will probably just continue to refer to you as an asshole.
Just saying.
Do people no longer say "God, what were you thinking?" in response to being told you did something stupid?
You have received a private message from:
Name: YamiRuss
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2129769/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Many Paths of Victory
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5561928/
With regards to the animal husbandry comment: I started from the fact that in
the anime and the games, people simply start training pokemon right away, and
I just don't think that would be possible in a world that fuses pokemon with
physics. My attempt was to draw a lot of comparisons between the two worlds
and use those comparisons to set up a compromise, and not to do so in a way
that forces me to assume the readers know exactly what I'm talking about
implicitly.
Believe me that I have never believed behaviorism is the end-all, be-all to
psychology. I prefer cognitive science, myself, but even on the opposite end
of the spectrum, I must admit that Skinner knew what he was talking. He had a
reasonable explanation for everything except language--he had the explanation,
but it's too much of an afterthought considering language is the primary basis
for communication. This story is not intended to be a debate of comparative
psychology, either; I simply wanted to establish early that I won't have my
characters speaking to their pokemon and the pokemon instantly understand
exactly what they're saying, with a possible exception of some psychic-types
who may, in fact, be likely to have upper reasoning skills.
Jin is not a kid; he's a science teacher, meaning he has some actual training
in psychology and other fields. I do not play the prodigy game unless it's
plot-relevant, and I certainly didn't turn his scyther into a super-soldier
just because it can do choreography--that was an unfair and baseless
accusation on your part. As far as your assertion that lack of interest equals
lack of skill, I purport that some athletes who have no interest in others may
still be pretty good. I, personally, never had any interest in baseball, yet I
picked it up in two weeks and became a fairly impressive third baseman. (You
can believe I'm exaggerating or not; it has no bearing on my life.) Jin has
already engaged his pokemon in combat situations (in particular, his
father's--the gym leader's--jolteon already has a wealth of experience) and so
has much more potential to move into pokemon battling than I had to play
baseball from just knowing basketball.
Forgive me when I say you are awfully pretentious in this review. I don't
know why you expect me to put my characters into *either* the real world or
the pokemon world. There is room for a gray area; that's one of the beauties
of creative liberty. My last retort is to let you know--because it seems so
important to you--that I ask for characters mainly as a way to avoid trying to
name them myself (admittedly my least favorite part of creating characters)
and to draw some interest in the story; people tend to read more when they
feel like they have their own roles. I understand how tough it actually is to
take someone else's personality and throw it into your own story. I have a
solution for that called "creative liberty" in which I discuss changes I'd
like to make to characters, and if the originator does not approve, I
respectfully decline to include the character. I know what kind of in-group
dynamics I want to have between the characters. This is not my first barbecue,
as it were.
I apologize for coming off as a closed-minded prude, but the approach you
take to your review almost invariably returns that mentality. If you are truly
upset by the approach I have decided to take with this story, I ask that you
simply ignore it. I know it's difficult for someone to ignore an argument when
he or she thinks everyone else is wrong in their approach, but please try if
all that can happen is you and I go at each other like a behaviorist from WVU
and a cognitive scientist from Michigan.
Sometimes I don't even know. "I know behaviorism isn't the best fit here so don't tell me I was wrong by having my character and story focus entirely on Skinner boxes and Pavlov's possibly nonexistent bell?" This isn't even the only time I've heard this. I can't even imagine how this is supposed to be a defense.
Name: Kat Wager
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2040456/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Present
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5562069/
Sweety, everyone makes mistakes in everything they ever do. Just because a
few things aren't perfect, doesn't mean you have to be a complete and utter
bitch about it. I understand you're trying to help, but the way you typed that
all up makes you come off as a bitch that makes me just want to slap you
silly. If you're going to write reviews for people, at least try to do it
kindly. Kindness tends to get you farther in life than your harsh, abrasive,
bitchy attitude I've seen from just this one review.
This pretty much wins the tone dissonance prize.
Name: sadeofraine
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1849453/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Present
You're one of those people who just sit down and read, and pick it apart to
see how much of an ass you can make yourself out to be. Sure, the grammar
wasn't perfect. Did you fail to read the Author's Note? She doesn't even
like this pairing. And the mistakes that you pointed out weren't really that
bad. Take a deep, calming breath and pull that stick out of your ass.
Anyone knows that if you are rude and condescending in a review, no one's
going to listen because they're too busy thinking of what an insufferable
ass you are. It's one thing to point out mistakes and calmly and POLITELY
point out errors. It's another thing to be a complete bitch about it.
So, my advice to you is what my mom has taught me. If you have nothing nice
to say, sit down and shut the hell up.
It's amazing how many people were told not to say anything if they couldn't say anything nice only to go on to violate it in the process of telling me.
Name: mhadz0021
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1806799/
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Subject: reply.
I DON'T CARE.
I don't freaking care.
Look,i get annoyed when i see rude suggestions in my reviews.
Would you just send them by PM?
I have my own way in writing my stories.
I hope we settle this down without a fight.Please don't reply after this.
Thanks!
...I don't even know.
Name: Spyromaster64
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1897370/
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Subject: review reply
Sorry, but the grammar was perfect in my word processor. It was probably that
Fanfiction didn't upload my document properly. Trust me, I'm a grammar freak.
The story's Pokemon_Mystery_Dungeon. So yeah, the reason he's talking about barley doing things is FFN's fault. Obviously. And obviously he's too busy to reupload his original, perfect document.
In conclusion, hate people.
Title: The Born Supremacy
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5566085/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1446756/
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Wow, you didn't even finish the review...
Okay, I must say that this is by far the longest review I have ever seen on ,
whether it was one that I have received or have seen on other stories. I'll
give you credit for having the patience to write something this extensive, but
seriously, that much?
Second, are you a fellow reader or a college professor? You practically
dissected my prologue sentence by sentence, and you didn't review the story as
a whole until towards the end, and it was rather unfinished, I might add.
Also, this is a Pokemon fan fiction, NOT a history/english text book.
ANYTHING can happen, and this is just the prologue. It's supposed to lead into
the main story, and whatever is unexplained is up to your imagination, so
don't think on it too much.
Your review consisted of naught but such negative remarks. Do I not deserve
some praise or, at least, some advice on how to improve my story-writing? I
have not seen one positive remark in what you said, and that hurts. And didn't
I just say NO FLAMING? As tact as your remarks were, they were rather harsh.
Therefore, I consider them part of a blazing flame raging from a torch of such
negativity.
Oh, and to answer some of your questions (since I can't possibly answer then
all):
1. I don't have a problem with Venezuela except for Hugo Chavez.
2. 'Sixa' is not a stupid name. It represents the six countries against the
Allied Powers, and it's also backwards for 'Axis'. Hmm?
3. I have studied history and current events quite extensively, well into
college; I know what I'm talking about. However, this is fiction, after all,
so I have the freedom to change things as I please (and some of what I have
said is true, contrary to what you might believe).
4. I have a problem with your sexism (if you're male) and your lack of pride
in the United States (I saw your profile; you live in the United States, as I
do). If you don't like my fic, criticize it, not my views, or else leave it
alone.
Yes, it's wrong to criticize an author's views just because he's writing a story based on them. Easily the winner here normally, but...
You have received a reply from the author, DaddyLongArms20, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Shadow of Amy's First Adventure
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5567829/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1986594/
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Hello! I am going to answer some of your questions you asked in your, eh...
Review if you can even call it that.
1st. (How exactly can a spelling error be "out of your control"?)
It's out of my control because i am a sophmore in high school and I am not an
export in the subjects of English and Spelling. You telling me I have no right
to write stories on this website.
2nd. (Oh, and "Shadow" is a terrible name that doesn't fit in at all with a
world
populated by Angies and Amys.)
You really think that I care about how well a characters name corrasponds to
another character's name or how many people have that name in the world?
I made the boy be named Shadow because he is the new generation version of
Ash. He is the shadow of Ash, as in he is like Ash was when he was Shadow's
age. As you will see in the future stories.
3rd. ("I hope he is alright and he didn't encounter something really
dangerous with
only Pikachu with him."
Because only having his strongest pokemon that can fry ground-types and has
been able to singlehandedly defeat virtually every challenge he faced during
his years of travel? He'll be doomed at the first random encounter. DOOMED I
TELL YOU.
"There is only one Pokémon I know of, that can dig a hole like this and
that’s most likely a Steelix"
"...Not an onix, of course, the very idea is ludicrous. Or an aggron. Or one
of the numerous other pokemon that are both large and capable of digging
holes. Nope, it's a steelix. It's the only possibility."
Okay, look, I know that there can be issues with writing description and
moves, but don't say it roared, and that this means it's using screech. Just
say it was screeching.
"Pikachu, get out of here and get the others while I try to keep him busy!"
"...Because clearly you are totally useless in an actual fight, and even I,
a
puny human, have a better chance.")
ok Ash tells pikachu to run because an eletric type doesn't stand a chance
against a ground type, yeah steelix may be a steel type to but its also a
ground type.
Ash stands a better chance cuz he is the protector of the family and pikachu,
and he would protect his loved ones before he worries about himself. Ever
hear the saying "love makes a person stronger"? Think about this as well, Ash
is alot older now, so he isn't that young trainer that ran from gym to gym,
but pikachu is still the small fast mouse pokemon he was earlier, so he could
run back to the house and grab a pokeball faster then ash could. Ash doesn't
want to lead a rampaging steelix back to a day care full of pokemon in his
care.
4th. (...If the kid doesn't even recognize you, you're a sucky godparent.
Shadow was born two weeks before you were and May wasn’t made your
God-mother until your 5th birthday when we went to visit Professor Oak to
take
all your father's Pokémon into our care. "
Uh, "he's slightly older than you" is not a good answer to "why has no one
mentioned him before?" More of a non sequitur, really. Also, godparents are
generally designated at birth. Strictly speaking they're supposed to be
there
for the baptism, but they're largely treated as sort of backup parents.
Oh, and "Shadow" is a terrible name that doesn't fit in at all with a world
populated by Angies and Amys.
"Drew didn’t want his son to know his parents traveled at such a young age
"
At what young age? Ten? Because traveling around at eleven is such a huge
and
enormous difference. I mean, ten year olds, we all know they're utterly
incompetent, not like eleven year olds who are mature and competent in every
way.)
ok Shadow and Amy live in different regions. May isn't Amy's only godmother,
Dawn is her godmother too... and correct me if i am wrong, which I am sure you
will, there isn't any religion in pokemon, its a world of magic and science,
not belief... and yeah if you haven't heard, you can have more then one
godmother, i do... my cousins do...
And times change it isn't common for the age of different responsibilites to
change... so back when ash started his journey he was ten, now its eleven
parents can be over protective of their children and might not want them to
leave home just yet... i mean, with people like team rocket, team aqua, team
magma, and team galactic i would't want my child far from home unless he had a
powerful team of pokemon with him.
lastly: this wasn't a review this was a critic... if you are so sure that you
are a great writer then send me your best story work rough draft and 1st
corrected version in a review and don't go over the story with any help but
what you know about english, and i'll see how many mistakes you make.
In other words nobodies perfect, even if you do write a perfect story with no
mistakes doesn't mean your an export, just means you strive for absolute
perfection... normally i, as a christen, see that quality in you as a person
as a good characteristic. It doesn't mean you can be so harsh in correcting,
no matter who your are, age and expirience otherwise...
you don't like my stories thats your opinion, but i enjoy writing stories and
poetry. I write more then i read... and this is the first place i found that i
could actually get positive feed back on my stories.
you don't like my stories, don't read them its as simple as that, but at
least have as many positive comments in a review as you do negative ones...
this review insulted my courage as a writer, but despite your negative
comments i am still going to write my stories, if they are correct some
grammatically well then they are if they aren't, they aren't...
With thanks for reading my story, but insulted by the negative comments from
a fellow writer, i wish you a good day and good health,
DaddyLongArms20
an
Yeah, it's a tough competition for most batshit.
You have received a reply from the author, NotQuiteHuman01, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Mutation : Beginnings
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5568253/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1732346/
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Ok i get what your trying to do, if your trrying to shame me off the site but
i realy don't need that kind of general bitching, that is not constructive
critisism that is something that makes me want to ask if you were deprived of
love from your parents as a child. If you look at sme of my other stories
you'll see that i'm a lot better usualy but i was editing a peice of writing
given to me by Palkiaman. The point behind the mutations is that they are
being purposly into weapons and are therefore very dangerous, as for the
containment fields the point is that they need to be stronger than bars to
hold back said dangerous creatures. I've seen much worse work on the site and
Palkiaman has already got low confidence so please offer some constructive
critisism or go to hell.
Yours NotQuiteHuman01
This is more just your standard dumb leading the dumb. But I liked the bit about how he nos his learnings.
And as an ending bonus, from someone who was more or less reasonable:
it's generally been said that fictional species should be capitalized
This is why I've long since stopped acting like the capitalization side has a leg to stand on. I'm the only one who seems to know the actual rule. Everyone else sees it done, does it, and then when it's brought up make up some utterly random guess for why they're right. The Nintendo does it side used to have a point and a recognizable set of reasoning, but that was before the Capital Letters For All phrase. And everyone else just needs to be disemboweled by griffins.
Or chickens. Chickens will do.
You have received a reply from the author, Mystik Shadows, regarding the review you posted for:
Title: Sauntering Shadows
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5555126/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1940047/
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I have had enough of you! You know how many good fanfcitiosn you've
practically flamed? I know you'd say that it's constructiv critism, but
honestly, I can't believe how nasty you're being!
And, I know that I've got quite a few errors, but I think you could at least
give me a break.
And you know what else? You obiously think that I did pick up a thesaurus,
put maybe you should start trying to realize that soem people have
VOCABULARYS. Ever heard of one?
You could at leats just give a nice, simple review and leave it t that, not
just point out all the errors! Well, I don't mind the fact that you did point
them out, but you didn't have to be so severe. I don't suppose any of your
fics are any better.
Good fanfcitiosn really does sum it up nicely.
Name: evee11
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2144467/
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Subject: SLOW DOWN
WHAT ARE YOU, MY TEACHER?!!! IF YOU READ MY PROFILE, I'M ELEVEN YEARS OLD!
SO WHAT IF THE WERE MISTAKES. I LOVE TO WRITE AND EVERYONE AT SCHOOL SAYS I'M
GREAT AT IT, BUT I'M NO PROFESSIONAL. JEEZ. I MEAN, GIVE ME A BREAK! I'M
TRYING THE BEST I CAN. WHAT IF SOMEONE REVIEWED YOUR STORY LISTED ALL OF YOUR
MISTAKES? EVERYONE MAKES MISTAKES. YOU DON'T HAVE TO BE A MEAN. YOU KNOW,
THAT REVIEW WILL BE POSTED EVERYTIME SOMEONE REVIEWS. WHAT IF THEY READ YOUR
REVIEW AND START TO LIST ALL OF MY MISTAKES? I THINK I CAN DELETE REVIEWS,
BUT, I'M GOING TO KEEP YOURS, EVEN THOUGH IT WAS A LITTLE MEAN.
In the interests of fairness their second PM was quite sane.
Name: megachile
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1813756/
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Subject: re: Your review to Drawing Love
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5555605/
okay, about the thoughts and all that, you might be right, however, my
grammar sucks, cause i DONT live in an english speaking country and i'm NOT
very good in writting english, in Chile, the language is spanish, and english
is looked like something only gifted people know, so why don't you check
before flaming or whatever and if you read my profile, it warns it!, and
instead of saying boring, tiresome in a way that makes me feel like i'm some
sort of retarded bastard, why don't you TRY to put it in a nicer way, at
least, giving some hope of improvment. THANK YOU!
As a side note, their profile also claims that they're seventeen. So yeah.
Name: J.Whitnee
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1690703/
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Subject: re: Your review to Cyber Entity
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5553095/
Whoa. Girl, what did you eat? Sugar cubes mixed in with dog shit? Push it
down on the ranting on my friend here. Sure, you are trying to say what she
did wrong, but that can easily be done without you swearing and being a total
moron. Ok, first, what is wrong with oc fics? No, it is not like "trying to
complete a hundred-piece puzzle by taking fifty of the pieces from fifty other
puzzles". No. Your opinion, fine respected, but never tell others how to run
their fic. It's theirs, buddy, and if you don't like it then screw off.
And no. OC fics are not like that. NO they do not make you end up with a
mess.
NO.
Second, Regular pokemon opening games are so cliche, and as you may go "oh
its like that in every single game", I go, "BECAUSE it's like that in every
single game that i am GLAD she did not start like it".
Your quote:
"Hmph, this will be great, though I do feel sorry for the person that will
get this virus first, if their family fails to admit them to a hospital within
forty-eight hours things could get uglier for that person then the rest of the
victims"
That's right! You show that corporation by infecting innocent kids who have
nothing to do with it! Next up, get back at Cindy from middle school by
sending anthrax-filled letters to random people in China, and then teach the
dog not to poop on the carpet by throwing rocks through hospital windows.
JUSTICE!
Ok, wait. there is nothing there that has said that these men are getting
back at the corporation. You don't know this story. Maybe they want to use the
corporation to kill a bunch of people? maybe they were hire by the
corporatioin so that they can kill a bunch of kids. Don't jump to conclusions,
and don't be a moron when you do.
Why am i even wasting my time on you?
Go rant someone elses fic. Make sure it's not one of my buddies. If you are
going to tell people what they did wrong, then don't rant. Tell them.
I'm honestly always bothered by the whole "what you're doing is VERY VERY WRONG AND HURTS PEOPLE so go do it to someone I don't know" concept. Further evidence I reside on the far edge of tribal dynamics.
Name: Svay
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/378664/
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Subject: Thank you for your very detailed review.
First off, I understand that I made a mistake with saline waters and with the
commas but thanks for pointing it out to me in the most sarcastic and bitchy
way possible. If you want to give "constructive criticism" then your nasty
comment "Stop picking words out of a thesaurus," really isn' necessary. The
word saline was used improperly-I GET IT. Also, as far as my grammatical and
syntex errors are concerned, you were not completely correct.
I am aware that Mew can teleport. That doesn't mean that she'll always
teleport to certain places instead of flying there. Mew flew to New Island in
the movie and in MY story she flew to the beach instead of teleporting. It
worked out with my plot better and if you have a problem with it then that is
YOU'RE PROBLEM. As far as the gender of my character, I put that in there to
further distinguish the female Mewtwo from the male Mewtwo. Therefore, there
would be something more than her green eyes or her voice to distinguish them.
If the fact that I gave her breasts affects you SO much then I'm sorry. I
didn't know you were that sensitive...or picky. Regardless, get over it.
The female Mewtwo does have a name, Alana, since her conversation was cut
short with Mew that will come later in the story. As far as the whole
helicopter situation goes, Alana destroyed the building first when she
escaped. The helicopers came afterwards because of the explosion. She didn't
go over there and destroy them after the helicopters passed overhead. She
disappeared because she didn't want to be seen because she didn't want her
existance to be known by humans. I was going to get to this in later chapters
but since it bothered you so much maybe I should make an announcement at the
end of the chapter. Last but not least, Mew was worried about Alana causing
the explosion because she did not want a repeat of what Mewtwo did when he was
born. Characters can have more than one side---it's called "depth." Just
because Mew didn't act a certain way in the movie doesn't mean that she
shouldn't be worried about a particular situation. With her being pyschic she
had a feeling that things were going to get worse with Alana and she is right.
FYI I've only made two chapters so far and I will further explain things in
the chapters to come.
If you don't like my story then don't read it. I really could care less about
your personal opinions on what you THINK I should do and how I should write. I
will add more chapters and you're rather rude critiques really aren't needed.
I'm sure you're going to write me back some nasty email about what I've said
so know this: don't wast your time.By the way, if you send another review to
my story to get even I'll report you. I don't have time to argue with some
one who obviously has a bug up their ass. Write away if you wish but I'll
ignore it. I'm in college and I don't have time to study the wonderful world
of pokemon as much as you obviously do.
Among other things, this is pretty much exactly what I mean when I tell people I don't want a long review explaining how nothing is wrong. If I saw that in a fic with Mewtwo and a mewtwo it's important to give the other one a name immediately, I don't give a damn that you've picked a name.
It's also why I tend to take author responses as unreliable at best. If I explain myself, it's GEEZ I GET IT SHUT UP. But if I didn't, it'd probably be U R WRONG THE DICTIONARY SAYS.
You have received a reply from the author, Ooshii Kurai, regarding the review
you posted for:
Title: The Mystery Of Me
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5560782/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/84968/
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Wow. Just wow.
Did you seriously just copy and paste the bottom half of that review from
your other reviews? What the crap?
You sound so petty and ignorant in your review that I actually feel
embarrassed for you. Do you know what a grammar nazi is? It isn't a term of
endearment, honey.
I'm sure you are a great writer, and maybe you mean well. But it doesn't come
across. Don't become a critic. Unless you like people not liking you.
Think of this way. How often do you listen to advice from someone who starts
off the conversation with, "God what were you thinking?"
There is a nice way to tell someone that their story needs work. If you try
being nice, maybe your reviews will actually be listened to, praised even.
Until then, people will probably just continue to refer to you as an asshole.
Just saying.
Do people no longer say "God, what were you thinking?" in response to being told you did something stupid?
You have received a private message from:
Name: YamiRuss
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2129769/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Many Paths of Victory
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5561928/
With regards to the animal husbandry comment: I started from the fact that in
the anime and the games, people simply start training pokemon right away, and
I just don't think that would be possible in a world that fuses pokemon with
physics. My attempt was to draw a lot of comparisons between the two worlds
and use those comparisons to set up a compromise, and not to do so in a way
that forces me to assume the readers know exactly what I'm talking about
implicitly.
Believe me that I have never believed behaviorism is the end-all, be-all to
psychology. I prefer cognitive science, myself, but even on the opposite end
of the spectrum, I must admit that Skinner knew what he was talking. He had a
reasonable explanation for everything except language--he had the explanation,
but it's too much of an afterthought considering language is the primary basis
for communication. This story is not intended to be a debate of comparative
psychology, either; I simply wanted to establish early that I won't have my
characters speaking to their pokemon and the pokemon instantly understand
exactly what they're saying, with a possible exception of some psychic-types
who may, in fact, be likely to have upper reasoning skills.
Jin is not a kid; he's a science teacher, meaning he has some actual training
in psychology and other fields. I do not play the prodigy game unless it's
plot-relevant, and I certainly didn't turn his scyther into a super-soldier
just because it can do choreography--that was an unfair and baseless
accusation on your part. As far as your assertion that lack of interest equals
lack of skill, I purport that some athletes who have no interest in others may
still be pretty good. I, personally, never had any interest in baseball, yet I
picked it up in two weeks and became a fairly impressive third baseman. (You
can believe I'm exaggerating or not; it has no bearing on my life.) Jin has
already engaged his pokemon in combat situations (in particular, his
father's--the gym leader's--jolteon already has a wealth of experience) and so
has much more potential to move into pokemon battling than I had to play
baseball from just knowing basketball.
Forgive me when I say you are awfully pretentious in this review. I don't
know why you expect me to put my characters into *either* the real world or
the pokemon world. There is room for a gray area; that's one of the beauties
of creative liberty. My last retort is to let you know--because it seems so
important to you--that I ask for characters mainly as a way to avoid trying to
name them myself (admittedly my least favorite part of creating characters)
and to draw some interest in the story; people tend to read more when they
feel like they have their own roles. I understand how tough it actually is to
take someone else's personality and throw it into your own story. I have a
solution for that called "creative liberty" in which I discuss changes I'd
like to make to characters, and if the originator does not approve, I
respectfully decline to include the character. I know what kind of in-group
dynamics I want to have between the characters. This is not my first barbecue,
as it were.
I apologize for coming off as a closed-minded prude, but the approach you
take to your review almost invariably returns that mentality. If you are truly
upset by the approach I have decided to take with this story, I ask that you
simply ignore it. I know it's difficult for someone to ignore an argument when
he or she thinks everyone else is wrong in their approach, but please try if
all that can happen is you and I go at each other like a behaviorist from WVU
and a cognitive scientist from Michigan.
Sometimes I don't even know. "I know behaviorism isn't the best fit here so don't tell me I was wrong by having my character and story focus entirely on Skinner boxes and Pavlov's possibly nonexistent bell?" This isn't even the only time I've heard this. I can't even imagine how this is supposed to be a defense.
Name: Kat Wager
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2040456/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Present
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/5562069/
Sweety, everyone makes mistakes in everything they ever do. Just because a
few things aren't perfect, doesn't mean you have to be a complete and utter
bitch about it. I understand you're trying to help, but the way you typed that
all up makes you come off as a bitch that makes me just want to slap you
silly. If you're going to write reviews for people, at least try to do it
kindly. Kindness tends to get you farther in life than your harsh, abrasive,
bitchy attitude I've seen from just this one review.
This pretty much wins the tone dissonance prize.
Name: sadeofraine
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1849453/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Present
You're one of those people who just sit down and read, and pick it apart to
see how much of an ass you can make yourself out to be. Sure, the grammar
wasn't perfect. Did you fail to read the Author's Note? She doesn't even
like this pairing. And the mistakes that you pointed out weren't really that
bad. Take a deep, calming breath and pull that stick out of your ass.
Anyone knows that if you are rude and condescending in a review, no one's
going to listen because they're too busy thinking of what an insufferable
ass you are. It's one thing to point out mistakes and calmly and POLITELY
point out errors. It's another thing to be a complete bitch about it.
So, my advice to you is what my mom has taught me. If you have nothing nice
to say, sit down and shut the hell up.
It's amazing how many people were told not to say anything if they couldn't say anything nice only to go on to violate it in the process of telling me.
Name: mhadz0021
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1806799/
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Subject: reply.
I DON'T CARE.
I don't freaking care.
Look,i get annoyed when i see rude suggestions in my reviews.
Would you just send them by PM?
I have my own way in writing my stories.
I hope we settle this down without a fight.Please don't reply after this.
Thanks!
...I don't even know.
Name: Spyromaster64
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1897370/
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Subject: review reply
Sorry, but the grammar was perfect in my word processor. It was probably that
Fanfiction didn't upload my document properly. Trust me, I'm a grammar freak.
The story's Pokemon_Mystery_Dungeon. So yeah, the reason he's talking about barley doing things is FFN's fault. Obviously. And obviously he's too busy to reupload his original, perfect document.
In conclusion, hate people.
Title: The Born Supremacy
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5566085/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1446756/
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Wow, you didn't even finish the review...
Okay, I must say that this is by far the longest review I have ever seen on ,
whether it was one that I have received or have seen on other stories. I'll
give you credit for having the patience to write something this extensive, but
seriously, that much?
Second, are you a fellow reader or a college professor? You practically
dissected my prologue sentence by sentence, and you didn't review the story as
a whole until towards the end, and it was rather unfinished, I might add.
Also, this is a Pokemon fan fiction, NOT a history/english text book.
ANYTHING can happen, and this is just the prologue. It's supposed to lead into
the main story, and whatever is unexplained is up to your imagination, so
don't think on it too much.
Your review consisted of naught but such negative remarks. Do I not deserve
some praise or, at least, some advice on how to improve my story-writing? I
have not seen one positive remark in what you said, and that hurts. And didn't
I just say NO FLAMING? As tact as your remarks were, they were rather harsh.
Therefore, I consider them part of a blazing flame raging from a torch of such
negativity.
Oh, and to answer some of your questions (since I can't possibly answer then
all):
1. I don't have a problem with Venezuela except for Hugo Chavez.
2. 'Sixa' is not a stupid name. It represents the six countries against the
Allied Powers, and it's also backwards for 'Axis'. Hmm?
3. I have studied history and current events quite extensively, well into
college; I know what I'm talking about. However, this is fiction, after all,
so I have the freedom to change things as I please (and some of what I have
said is true, contrary to what you might believe).
4. I have a problem with your sexism (if you're male) and your lack of pride
in the United States (I saw your profile; you live in the United States, as I
do). If you don't like my fic, criticize it, not my views, or else leave it
alone.
Yes, it's wrong to criticize an author's views just because he's writing a story based on them. Easily the winner here normally, but...
You have received a reply from the author, DaddyLongArms20, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Shadow of Amy's First Adventure
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5567829/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1986594/
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Hello! I am going to answer some of your questions you asked in your, eh...
Review if you can even call it that.
1st. (How exactly can a spelling error be "out of your control"?)
It's out of my control because i am a sophmore in high school and I am not an
export in the subjects of English and Spelling. You telling me I have no right
to write stories on this website.
2nd. (Oh, and "Shadow" is a terrible name that doesn't fit in at all with a
world
populated by Angies and Amys.)
You really think that I care about how well a characters name corrasponds to
another character's name or how many people have that name in the world?
I made the boy be named Shadow because he is the new generation version of
Ash. He is the shadow of Ash, as in he is like Ash was when he was Shadow's
age. As you will see in the future stories.
3rd. ("I hope he is alright and he didn't encounter something really
dangerous with
only Pikachu with him."
Because only having his strongest pokemon that can fry ground-types and has
been able to singlehandedly defeat virtually every challenge he faced during
his years of travel? He'll be doomed at the first random encounter. DOOMED I
TELL YOU.
"There is only one Pokémon I know of, that can dig a hole like this and
that’s most likely a Steelix"
"...Not an onix, of course, the very idea is ludicrous. Or an aggron. Or one
of the numerous other pokemon that are both large and capable of digging
holes. Nope, it's a steelix. It's the only possibility."
Okay, look, I know that there can be issues with writing description and
moves, but don't say it roared, and that this means it's using screech. Just
say it was screeching.
"Pikachu, get out of here and get the others while I try to keep him busy!"
"...Because clearly you are totally useless in an actual fight, and even I,
a
puny human, have a better chance.")
ok Ash tells pikachu to run because an eletric type doesn't stand a chance
against a ground type, yeah steelix may be a steel type to but its also a
ground type.
Ash stands a better chance cuz he is the protector of the family and pikachu,
and he would protect his loved ones before he worries about himself. Ever
hear the saying "love makes a person stronger"? Think about this as well, Ash
is alot older now, so he isn't that young trainer that ran from gym to gym,
but pikachu is still the small fast mouse pokemon he was earlier, so he could
run back to the house and grab a pokeball faster then ash could. Ash doesn't
want to lead a rampaging steelix back to a day care full of pokemon in his
care.
4th. (...If the kid doesn't even recognize you, you're a sucky godparent.
Shadow was born two weeks before you were and May wasn’t made your
God-mother until your 5th birthday when we went to visit Professor Oak to
take
all your father's Pokémon into our care. "
Uh, "he's slightly older than you" is not a good answer to "why has no one
mentioned him before?" More of a non sequitur, really. Also, godparents are
generally designated at birth. Strictly speaking they're supposed to be
there
for the baptism, but they're largely treated as sort of backup parents.
Oh, and "Shadow" is a terrible name that doesn't fit in at all with a world
populated by Angies and Amys.
"Drew didn’t want his son to know his parents traveled at such a young age
"
At what young age? Ten? Because traveling around at eleven is such a huge
and
enormous difference. I mean, ten year olds, we all know they're utterly
incompetent, not like eleven year olds who are mature and competent in every
way.)
ok Shadow and Amy live in different regions. May isn't Amy's only godmother,
Dawn is her godmother too... and correct me if i am wrong, which I am sure you
will, there isn't any religion in pokemon, its a world of magic and science,
not belief... and yeah if you haven't heard, you can have more then one
godmother, i do... my cousins do...
And times change it isn't common for the age of different responsibilites to
change... so back when ash started his journey he was ten, now its eleven
parents can be over protective of their children and might not want them to
leave home just yet... i mean, with people like team rocket, team aqua, team
magma, and team galactic i would't want my child far from home unless he had a
powerful team of pokemon with him.
lastly: this wasn't a review this was a critic... if you are so sure that you
are a great writer then send me your best story work rough draft and 1st
corrected version in a review and don't go over the story with any help but
what you know about english, and i'll see how many mistakes you make.
In other words nobodies perfect, even if you do write a perfect story with no
mistakes doesn't mean your an export, just means you strive for absolute
perfection... normally i, as a christen, see that quality in you as a person
as a good characteristic. It doesn't mean you can be so harsh in correcting,
no matter who your are, age and expirience otherwise...
you don't like my stories thats your opinion, but i enjoy writing stories and
poetry. I write more then i read... and this is the first place i found that i
could actually get positive feed back on my stories.
you don't like my stories, don't read them its as simple as that, but at
least have as many positive comments in a review as you do negative ones...
this review insulted my courage as a writer, but despite your negative
comments i am still going to write my stories, if they are correct some
grammatically well then they are if they aren't, they aren't...
With thanks for reading my story, but insulted by the negative comments from
a fellow writer, i wish you a good day and good health,
DaddyLongArms20
an
Yeah, it's a tough competition for most batshit.
You have received a reply from the author, NotQuiteHuman01, regarding the
review you posted for:
Title: Mutation : Beginnings
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5568253/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1732346/
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Ok i get what your trying to do, if your trrying to shame me off the site but
i realy don't need that kind of general bitching, that is not constructive
critisism that is something that makes me want to ask if you were deprived of
love from your parents as a child. If you look at sme of my other stories
you'll see that i'm a lot better usualy but i was editing a peice of writing
given to me by Palkiaman. The point behind the mutations is that they are
being purposly into weapons and are therefore very dangerous, as for the
containment fields the point is that they need to be stronger than bars to
hold back said dangerous creatures. I've seen much worse work on the site and
Palkiaman has already got low confidence so please offer some constructive
critisism or go to hell.
Yours NotQuiteHuman01
This is more just your standard dumb leading the dumb. But I liked the bit about how he nos his learnings.
And as an ending bonus, from someone who was more or less reasonable:
it's generally been said that fictional species should be capitalized
This is why I've long since stopped acting like the capitalization side has a leg to stand on. I'm the only one who seems to know the actual rule. Everyone else sees it done, does it, and then when it's brought up make up some utterly random guess for why they're right. The Nintendo does it side used to have a point and a recognizable set of reasoning, but that was before the Capital Letters For All phrase. And everyone else just needs to be disemboweled by griffins.
Or chickens. Chickens will do.
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Date: 2009-12-11 03:38 pm (UTC)Aside, the level of discourse here actually makes me *like* SPPf. What have you done??
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Date: 2009-12-11 04:59 pm (UTC)Just remember: the people at Serebii will keep being exactly that stupid next year, while plenty of the FFN group will realize their error.
Also, people on FFN occasionally just shut up.
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Date: 2009-12-11 04:04 pm (UTC)Ash stands a better chance cuz he is the protector of the family and pikachu,
and he would protect his loved ones before he worries about himself.
Effin' hell! O_O So, wait, Ash stands a better chance at beating a freakin' steelix than the overpowered supermouse with various attacks does? BECAUSE OF THE POWER OF LOVE, DUDE!
These people... *dies* Even better than the ranting in your forum. Awesome! Almost makes me want to review that DaddyLongArms guy, but that would probably be bad/baiting/eeeevil.
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Date: 2009-12-11 05:08 pm (UTC)...Wait, what do you mean "that's not an excuse"?no subject
Date: 2009-12-12 05:18 am (UTC)This is probably why they fail so often.
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Date: 2009-12-11 05:07 pm (UTC)Why is it that people assume that just because you're X means you've also been trained in Y? Granted, I can understand dappling in a bit of psychology if you're a teacher because that's part of what a good education major does (assuming you actually majored in education in college), but just because you're a science teacher hardly means you're remotely well-versed in psychology.
Because political organizations are usually prone to kind-of-sort-of anagrams? 'Kay.
So, wait. I don't get it. Why did he write a fic in English instead of Spanish if he has no interest in actually practicing or learning the language?
Also, ah, NotQuiteHuman. I read his DNArmy (out of my "I'll review your stuff if you review my stuff" policy that I had up until I realized I'm in college), and... yeah, better at editing? Really?
He excels at creativity too. Aside from the fact that his other stories are the generic "morphs through virus" plots, DNArmy was blatantly ripped off one of my fics. But that's just me ranting about egotism.
I'd go on, but really, this makes me want to stop writing the paper I should be writing and go review stuff. Still, thanks for the amusing distraction.
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Date: 2009-12-11 06:16 pm (UTC)My guess would be either that there's so much less exposure in the Spanish section of FFN (the first page of the "Just In" Pokémon section goes back to mid-October), or because he can tell people he's writing something in English, which his sentence implies is impressive to others in his age group/location because people there think that knowing English is pretty high-class, and they probably won't be able to tell good English from bad very reliably.
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Date: 2009-12-11 11:30 pm (UTC)Also, psychology is an absolute clusterfuck. It's like the poster child for why science needs to be properly falsifiable (or was, until evolutionary biology stole the post) There's at least a bit of weeding out with actual scientists, but teachers can be devotees of all sorts of stupid, out of date bullshit.
I'm just saying that if the average guy on the street told me something about psychology, I would think that was interesting, and if he told me he was a teacher next I'd figure it was probably either disproved or about to be.
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Date: 2009-12-11 06:37 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-12-11 08:55 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2009-12-11 08:56 pm (UTC)"You can follow my replies and actually watch as I lose my temper."
Yikes. Edit button, plzthxbai?
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Date: 2009-12-11 09:33 pm (UTC)Painful, isn't it? Arguing with some of those people is like throwing things at walls. Most of the shit falls to the ground, but unfortunately some of it manages to bounce back and hit you in the face.
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Date: 2009-12-11 11:33 pm (UTC)I'm listening to NPR now. I swear I can feel my brain rewiring.
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Date: 2009-12-12 01:09 am (UTC)i also like how people accusing you of being condescending begin by addressing you as "sweetie". GOOD JOB GUYS
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Date: 2010-06-23 07:49 pm (UTC)