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So a little while back I got a new review for Reality.
This wasn't written particularly well. I think you could improve on your basic literary techniques. Oh yes, the spelling and grammar were almost perfect and the sentences were nicely structured but there was no flair, no compassion...no interest. It was very dry and lifeless.
Also this is a highly unoriginal idea. Of course, fanfiction isn't exaclty original but this idea is a very cliched, overdone genre. Perhaps your idea when writing it was to write a reality fic in the correct way, but firstly you seem to be failing and secondly, like I said before it's not very impressive and doesn't stand out from the rest of the dismal Just In page.
Now, it's probably just me being hypocritical of course, but I found the review obnoxious, condescending and useless. However, concrit is concrit (or, in this case, the possibility of concrit) and I've gotten so inured to internet rudeness that it's not really an issue. I pounce on the slim possibility that this person might be able to give good advice and use the 'review reply' feature to contact them, explaining the story is intentionally written to be somewhat distanced, that they need to be more specific about what I'm doing wrong for me to fix it, that while, yes, it's been done before, it hasn't been done well so I feel there's still room for another story, and point out that given the relative quality levels, I can't possibly be failing to 'write a pokemon-becomes-real story that's better than the average'.
But, I say, I do appreciate any concrit they might give, and write out my email address explaining I'd prefer to be contacted through that.
I get a PM from them.
( Seriously, I'd kill for real concrit. But I get this stuff instead. )
More on the saga as (or if) it continues.
Meanwhile I should probably work on Ch5 of Reality.
This wasn't written particularly well. I think you could improve on your basic literary techniques. Oh yes, the spelling and grammar were almost perfect and the sentences were nicely structured but there was no flair, no compassion...no interest. It was very dry and lifeless.
Also this is a highly unoriginal idea. Of course, fanfiction isn't exaclty original but this idea is a very cliched, overdone genre. Perhaps your idea when writing it was to write a reality fic in the correct way, but firstly you seem to be failing and secondly, like I said before it's not very impressive and doesn't stand out from the rest of the dismal Just In page.
Now, it's probably just me being hypocritical of course, but I found the review obnoxious, condescending and useless. However, concrit is concrit (or, in this case, the possibility of concrit) and I've gotten so inured to internet rudeness that it's not really an issue. I pounce on the slim possibility that this person might be able to give good advice and use the 'review reply' feature to contact them, explaining the story is intentionally written to be somewhat distanced, that they need to be more specific about what I'm doing wrong for me to fix it, that while, yes, it's been done before, it hasn't been done well so I feel there's still room for another story, and point out that given the relative quality levels, I can't possibly be failing to 'write a pokemon-becomes-real story that's better than the average'.
But, I say, I do appreciate any concrit they might give, and write out my email address explaining I'd prefer to be contacted through that.
I get a PM from them.
( Seriously, I'd kill for real concrit. But I get this stuff instead. )
More on the saga as (or if) it continues.
Meanwhile I should probably work on Ch5 of Reality.
