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Monsters story
Apr. 9th, 2008 10:18 amThe opening of the story! Really rough structurally and I have no idea how much I'll keep, so feel free to suggest any changes. Which pretty much means responses of "everything you are doing is wrong and the story itself is an abomination that offends god by its very existence" are welcome.
( Poorly structured story is poorly structured! )
I'm not sure if I'll keep the first day of school setup, or having them all there at the same time (it's important that Mike and Crystal are there before Brewelph, and it'd give me more time to establish them, but on the other hand I'm not sure if I should be doing things to peg the timeline as a big deal) rather than having Brewelph show up a bit later.
( Poorly structured story is poorly structured! )
I'm not sure if I'll keep the first day of school setup, or having them all there at the same time (it's important that Mike and Crystal are there before Brewelph, and it'd give me more time to establish them, but on the other hand I'm not sure if I should be doing things to peg the timeline as a big deal) rather than having Brewelph show up a bit later.
