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farlaName: Unknownlight
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1605506/
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Subject: re: Your review to Not A Lot
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6696493/
"You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't
capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you
should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's
pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a
proper noun, which are the names of places or things."
Incorrect, all species of Pokémon capitalize the first letter as if it was a
proper noun. It doesn't make grammatical sense, yes, but it's what Nintendo
decided. Check any piece of official media to see. Don't criticize an author
for getting it /correct/.
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Name: KoushiroPaladin
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2649577/
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Subject: re: Your review to Arcadia: Satoshi Effect
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6698098/
Thanks for the input. Most of my knowledge is self-taught, so any input is
most helpful. Do you know any good sites that could help me learn more about
dialogue?
Also, this is an Alternate Universe, so things will be very different from the
actually series. Hopefully things will become clearer with time.
Again, thank you for the criticism. If you spot anything else, be sure to let
me know.
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Name: mortaldraco15
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2616376/
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Subject: re: Your review to Dark as Night
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6683765/
It SHOULD be "is a good way"...being too lazy to look over a review before
posting it is not a good reason to chastise somebody else's work. This is a
step past the fine line between constructive critisism and just being mean,
and if you want to be mean, you have to put some effort into it. Nobody's
making you read the story.
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Story: Pokemon Revolution
Chapter: 1. And So It Begins
From: Remember me ()
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Hey FARLA. JIRACHI lover remember? QUIT YOUR JACK BUTT REVEIWS YOU FARTY
FARLA!
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Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: you should know - guess ()
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i agree with "too lazy for an account! EVERY SINGLE WORD
Guess who i am?...
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Someday, people will realize that a high review count attracts readers and that reviews ranting about the story sucking attracts them even more. Hopefully, not for some time.
Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 5. Chapter 5
From: Reviewer 101 ()
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While this story has a very interesting premise, your writing style is only
decent at best. To be completely blunt, your writing abuses thesaurus. You
have made it very clear that you have a fine grasp of the english language and
an enriched vocabulary, but it takes much more than that in order to craft a
great story.
The first chapter is nothing but purple prose. Tone down most of the adverbs
and adjectives. Also, adding dialog helps the reader connect with your
characters. This story needs more dialog and character interaction, and less
colorful descriptions. Your character has little to no emotion, and most
people will not care about him because of it.
If you don't know what 'purple prose' is, then I suggest you look it up. While
it helps paint a picture of your world and its inhabitants, using too much of
it will lead to a laughable or boring tale.
Remember, while sugary treats taste good, consuming too much just leads to
cavities and an upset stomach. Purple prose has a very similar effect on a
story.
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See? THIS is the revenge review people are supposed to give. (Well, the "decent" bit is optional, you're really advised to be harsher than that, but you know what I mean.) I want to hug you, anon.
Although I would like to know why people keep leaving reviews about the first chapter on later chapters.
Name: ordinary girl 112233
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2543066/
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Subject: re: Your review to brand new start
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6665171/
sorry
im used to starting my storeys like that
ill try to stop doing it
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Name: PeterFoster111
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2000994/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Worst Time to Battle
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6699103/
Jesus, too many or's. What is wrong with you? You can't expect everyone to
have the most perfect grammar/where-u-put-things as if your writing a book
that's going to make such a hit.
Also, in this story you don't even know the names of any trainers or the main
character. You only know the names of the Pokemon. So your Capitalizing stuff
can be put back since it's actully irrelevant.
And one more thing, I don't understand the "Rouge" thing. If your calling
yourself rouge then your clearly not as I can clearly see your name.
Now go back to sleep, puppy-on-a-bed XD.
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Story: You
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: Hate u4 a review on my story ()
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Insensitive, cold, dark, hell bound, cock sucking bitch.
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Sometimes I wonder if some of these reviews are people making fun of the other reviewers.
Bonus: A lovely thread started by someone offended by my terrible, terrible review.
Okay we all know who she is and I'm sure every 1 out of 5 of us hate her. This user has been going around the Pokemon fanfiction community for a while now posting reviews she claims she NEEDS to post that contain only criticism and copy/paste messages such as: You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
And it has been indeed been proven that the 'P' in Pokemon should be capitalized, proven in the games, mangas, Bulbapedia, ect. This is her opinion, not how we should write our stories.
Or messages like this: Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."
Once again, her opinion. We don't NEED(as she says) to write dialog and such like she thinks we SHOULD.
She needs to stop going around daily posting reviews telling people that how she thinks they should write, just like she does. She needs to learn that these are her opinions and she shouldn't be going around shoving her opinions down our throats and forcing us to write like her. Everyone has their own style that they're comfortable with whether it's script format or story format, and also we're not trying to be professional or perfect. We're not going around printing out stories and publishing them so they can be released to the public to buy.
Tell me what you think about her and we seriously need to figure out how we can get her to stop this nonsense. I've had constructive criticism before and the users took the time to praise things such as characters and plot, and even said what they think I should do is just a preference of theirs and even say stuff like "Good luck and with a little more polish your story will be a whole lot better. I hope my review helps :)" I wouldn't have a problem, but Farla goes around criticizing about every fanfic she doesn't like telling everyone the same things looking for their mistakes only rather than trying to enjoy the story and not telling them what she liked and such, so yeah I got a problem.
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1605506/
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Subject: re: Your review to Not A Lot
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6696493/
"You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't
capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you
should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's
pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a
proper noun, which are the names of places or things."
Incorrect, all species of Pokémon capitalize the first letter as if it was a
proper noun. It doesn't make grammatical sense, yes, but it's what Nintendo
decided. Check any piece of official media to see. Don't criticize an author
for getting it /correct/.
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Name: KoushiroPaladin
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2649577/
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Subject: re: Your review to Arcadia: Satoshi Effect
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6698098/
Thanks for the input. Most of my knowledge is self-taught, so any input is
most helpful. Do you know any good sites that could help me learn more about
dialogue?
Also, this is an Alternate Universe, so things will be very different from the
actually series. Hopefully things will become clearer with time.
Again, thank you for the criticism. If you spot anything else, be sure to let
me know.
--------------------
Name: mortaldraco15
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2616376/
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Subject: re: Your review to Dark as Night
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6683765/
It SHOULD be "is a good way"...being too lazy to look over a review before
posting it is not a good reason to chastise somebody else's work. This is a
step past the fine line between constructive critisism and just being mean,
and if you want to be mean, you have to put some effort into it. Nobody's
making you read the story.
--------------------
Story: Pokemon Revolution
Chapter: 1. And So It Begins
From: Remember me ()
-------------------
Hey FARLA. JIRACHI lover remember? QUIT YOUR JACK BUTT REVEIWS YOU FARTY
FARLA!
-------------------
Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: you should know - guess ()
-------------------
i agree with "too lazy for an account! EVERY SINGLE WORD
Guess who i am?...
-------------------
Someday, people will realize that a high review count attracts readers and that reviews ranting about the story sucking attracts them even more. Hopefully, not for some time.
Story: Inheritors
Chapter: 5. Chapter 5
From: Reviewer 101 ()
-------------------
While this story has a very interesting premise, your writing style is only
decent at best. To be completely blunt, your writing abuses thesaurus. You
have made it very clear that you have a fine grasp of the english language and
an enriched vocabulary, but it takes much more than that in order to craft a
great story.
The first chapter is nothing but purple prose. Tone down most of the adverbs
and adjectives. Also, adding dialog helps the reader connect with your
characters. This story needs more dialog and character interaction, and less
colorful descriptions. Your character has little to no emotion, and most
people will not care about him because of it.
If you don't know what 'purple prose' is, then I suggest you look it up. While
it helps paint a picture of your world and its inhabitants, using too much of
it will lead to a laughable or boring tale.
Remember, while sugary treats taste good, consuming too much just leads to
cavities and an upset stomach. Purple prose has a very similar effect on a
story.
-------------------
See? THIS is the revenge review people are supposed to give. (Well, the "decent" bit is optional, you're really advised to be harsher than that, but you know what I mean.) I want to hug you, anon.
Although I would like to know why people keep leaving reviews about the first chapter on later chapters.
Name: ordinary girl 112233
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2543066/
--------------------
Subject: re: Your review to brand new start
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6665171/
sorry
im used to starting my storeys like that
ill try to stop doing it
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Name: PeterFoster111
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2000994/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Worst Time to Battle
A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6699103/
Jesus, too many or's. What is wrong with you? You can't expect everyone to
have the most perfect grammar/where-u-put-things as if your writing a book
that's going to make such a hit.
Also, in this story you don't even know the names of any trainers or the main
character. You only know the names of the Pokemon. So your Capitalizing stuff
can be put back since it's actully irrelevant.
And one more thing, I don't understand the "Rouge" thing. If your calling
yourself rouge then your clearly not as I can clearly see your name.
Now go back to sleep, puppy-on-a-bed XD.
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Story: You
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: Hate u4 a review on my story ()
-------------------
Insensitive, cold, dark, hell bound, cock sucking bitch.
-------------------
Sometimes I wonder if some of these reviews are people making fun of the other reviewers.
Bonus: A lovely thread started by someone offended by my terrible, terrible review.
Okay we all know who she is and I'm sure every 1 out of 5 of us hate her. This user has been going around the Pokemon fanfiction community for a while now posting reviews she claims she NEEDS to post that contain only criticism and copy/paste messages such as: You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
And it has been indeed been proven that the 'P' in Pokemon should be capitalized, proven in the games, mangas, Bulbapedia, ect. This is her opinion, not how we should write our stories.
Or messages like this: Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."
Once again, her opinion. We don't NEED(as she says) to write dialog and such like she thinks we SHOULD.
She needs to stop going around daily posting reviews telling people that how she thinks they should write, just like she does. She needs to learn that these are her opinions and she shouldn't be going around shoving her opinions down our throats and forcing us to write like her. Everyone has their own style that they're comfortable with whether it's script format or story format, and also we're not trying to be professional or perfect. We're not going around printing out stories and publishing them so they can be released to the public to buy.
Tell me what you think about her and we seriously need to figure out how we can get her to stop this nonsense. I've had constructive criticism before and the users took the time to praise things such as characters and plot, and even said what they think I should do is just a preference of theirs and even say stuff like "Good luck and with a little more polish your story will be a whole lot better. I hope my review helps :)" I wouldn't have a problem, but Farla goes around criticizing about every fanfic she doesn't like telling everyone the same things looking for their mistakes only rather than trying to enjoy the story and not telling them what she liked and such, so yeah I got a problem.
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Date: 2011-02-06 05:47 am (UTC)Cahoooooooots!
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Date: 2011-02-06 06:40 am (UTC)Puppy-on-a-bed? I don't think I heard someone called you that before, nonetheless heard anyone said that, ever.O.o;
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Date: 2011-02-06 10:50 am (UTC)Pff, which one, the one where the boy was surprised to be saved by a girl? Oh, how offensive. I'll never watch another Disney movie again, or read a book, or walk outside my house... Oh, wait, only feminist morons are offended by something silly and commonplace like that, because men are, physically, the stronger sex.
Especially in pokémon, where gender has no bearing at all on attack power and other stats, amirite?
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Date: 2011-02-06 05:57 pm (UTC)That's why it was so enraging, it acted like guys being sexist is a universal, inescapable law of the universe. And it was going to show him learning he was wrong because it was so totally understandable he was like this and guys deserve praise for overcoming the natural way the universe is set up to treat women with a minimum of decency.
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