Sorry for the early boredom - I may well revise it if I can ever figure out a way that won't sacrifice the basic trainerficness. ^^ Although I made my family read it, I only forced the post-thirteen chapters on them. I'm glad the end was enough to make up for it.
When Lucky renamed him, I did wonder how Flare could go as far as to say 'a better name?' without her remembering that she'd promised him one too The same way my kind, wonderful readers could. My ending bit about how they're the same as Lucki was probably taken as a bit hyperbolic, but I did mean it. Since icemew was following their advice, if they'd brought it up it would have been changed.
I didn't get that Silver was unsuited for battle until she started openly freaking out about it It's kind of a Schroedinger's cat situation. Silver isn't unsuited for battle until Ch14 and on. Before that, two conflicting realities both exist, and they're both true as long as they aren't forced into contradiction. She's both objectively small, frail, and of a weaker bred line, and a perfectly decent battler. It can be justified in-story, as the battles are getting harder and she's not capable of improving to the same degree, but it's really one of the more parodic elements. Lucki's version of the story could have continued if she just hadn't kept the absol.
And yes, Fara...I'm actually thinking of changing the absol's name when she appears, since for one thing, it's a lot more obvious now, and since I don't really want her coming off as a real self-insert - gets too close to one of those parodies where an author stand-in shows up to tear the story down. Irin, maybe. Or Er. (I'd use something like Yan or Ying, but that'd violate the idea of her being something that stands on its own rather than being tied to humans.)
Link to the Mary Sue report? I'm fangirling this story with all of my little fangirl heart, and now that I've finished it, there really isn't much more to do besides reread it as it's posted on FF.net. That's frustrating. I want more goodies. If you ever want someone to ramble almost incoherently about it at, use me. I'd be THRILLED.
(Also, I caught Flare's reasoning behind the comment about Tryke's new name! There were a lot of things that I DIDN'T catcth, but I'd like to think that I still passed the test...)
Well, the mary sue report can be found here (http://community.livejournal.com/marysues/2554298.html), but it's not really much beyond the weirdness of me attacking myself for my writing.
My ending bit about how they're the same as Lucki was probably taken as a bit hyperbolic, but I did mean it. I wouldn't call it the same for Lucki to forget about Flare's promised re-naming and for the readers to do so; from her perspective, it had only been three days, her pokemon were at the center of her life, and Flare's reminder was about something she'd actively said and thought herself. Lucki would have had to have been incredibly self-absorbed not to notice (which she was, of course), while readers just had to be people who didn't re-read or remember enough about something they read online a few weeks/months ago. (I'd check the dates but the page isn't loading.)
It's kind of a Schroedinger's cat situation. Nice analysis - and Schroedinger's turtle is a cute image, for some reason. ^.^ (Not counting the nature of the thought experiment.) Could you put a Schroedinger training a squirtle into Reality? (Or would non-SI real person fic be too crossover-y?)
Yeah, Irin does work better for the ff.net one. It's curious, though; pokemon speech doesn't seem like it'd be easily transliterated. Do names that pokemon recieve in the absence of human culture exist as things exactly compatible with the Roman alphabet? Irin seems like she might have had a lot of contact with humans before, if she can speak English fluently; was there only one way to say her name in English, or did she adapt it to the closest word...?
I wouldn't call it the same for Lucki to forget about Flare's promised re-naming and for the readers to do so; from her perspective, it had only been three days, her pokemon were at the center of her life, and Flare's reminder was about something she'd actively said and thought herself.
Well, in a story, you're being presented with a limited amount of information, and dialogue is supposed to have meaning, as are scenes in general. It's somewhat apples and oranges, I suppose. But of the readers ever mentioned Flare's name, not in the long leadup to that scene, not when Lucki is trying to figure out what to call Tryke, not even when I asked them for a name for the evolved manectric.
Could you put a Schroedinger training a squirtle into Reality? (Or would non-SI real person fic be too crossover-y?) Clever but yes, too self-referential. (Also, the underlying workings of Reality often verge on Shroedinger states)
It's curious, though; pokemon speech doesn't seem like it'd be easily transliterated. Do names that pokemon recieve in the absence of human culture exist as things exactly compatible with the Roman alphabet? Irin seems like she might have had a lot of contact with humans before, if she can speak English fluently; was there only one way to say her name in English, or did she adapt it to the closest word...?
Artistic liberty, I'm afraid. The absol is supposed to be a counterpoint to the rest of the team, so she has a name while they don't and she can express herself without it being translated. She's meant as more or less of a demigod, so she lacks certain restrictions. Her speech is an expression of this, not a sign of earlier experience with humans, although she might have run into them before.
Pokemon names are an especially thorny issue. I've never heard a good way of resolving it. Like most people, I normally prefer to dodge by not naming, using nicknames, or using names assembled from words, where they could be translated. (I avoided mentioning what Saurius' actual name was for similar reasons.) Sometimes authors go with transliterated names, but that seems pretty unwieldy. I remember Dragonfree jumped through hoops to avoid the problem entirely in her story.
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Date: 2007-05-09 01:33 am (UTC)When Lucky renamed him, I did wonder how Flare could go as far as to say 'a better name?' without her remembering that she'd promised him one too
The same way my kind, wonderful readers could. My ending bit about how they're the same as Lucki was probably taken as a bit hyperbolic, but I did mean it. Since icemew was following their advice, if they'd brought it up it would have been changed.
I didn't get that Silver was unsuited for battle until she started openly freaking out about it
It's kind of a Schroedinger's cat situation. Silver isn't unsuited for battle until Ch14 and on. Before that, two conflicting realities both exist, and they're both true as long as they aren't forced into contradiction. She's both objectively small, frail, and of a weaker bred line, and a perfectly decent battler. It can be justified in-story, as the battles are getting harder and she's not capable of improving to the same degree, but it's really one of the more parodic elements. Lucki's version of the story could have continued if she just hadn't kept the absol.
And yes, Fara...I'm actually thinking of changing the absol's name when she appears, since for one thing, it's a lot more obvious now, and since I don't really want her coming off as a real self-insert - gets too close to one of those parodies where an author stand-in shows up to tear the story down. Irin, maybe. Or Er. (I'd use something like Yan or Ying, but that'd violate the idea of her being something that stands on its own rather than being tied to humans.)
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Date: 2007-05-25 01:28 am (UTC)(Also, I caught Flare's reasoning behind the comment about Tryke's new name! There were a lot of things that I DIDN'T catcth, but I'd like to think that I still passed the test...)
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Date: 2007-05-25 08:51 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-06-18 01:20 am (UTC)I wouldn't call it the same for Lucki to forget about Flare's promised re-naming and for the readers to do so; from her perspective, it had only been three days, her pokemon were at the center of her life, and Flare's reminder was about something she'd actively said and thought herself. Lucki would have had to have been incredibly self-absorbed not to notice (which she was, of course), while readers just had to be people who didn't re-read or remember enough about something they read online a few weeks/months ago. (I'd check the dates but the page isn't loading.)
It's kind of a Schroedinger's cat situation.
Nice analysis - and Schroedinger's turtle is a cute image, for some reason. ^.^ (Not counting the nature of the thought experiment.) Could you put a Schroedinger training a squirtle into Reality? (Or would non-SI real person fic be too crossover-y?)
Yeah, Irin does work better for the ff.net one. It's curious, though; pokemon speech doesn't seem like it'd be easily transliterated. Do names that pokemon recieve in the absence of human culture exist as things exactly compatible with the Roman alphabet? Irin seems like she might have had a lot of contact with humans before, if she can speak English fluently; was there only one way to say her name in English, or did she adapt it to the closest word...?
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Date: 2007-06-18 03:52 am (UTC)Well, in a story, you're being presented with a limited amount of information, and dialogue is supposed to have meaning, as are scenes in general. It's somewhat apples and oranges, I suppose. But of the readers ever mentioned Flare's name, not in the long leadup to that scene, not when Lucki is trying to figure out what to call Tryke, not even when I asked them for a name for the evolved manectric.
Could you put a Schroedinger training a squirtle into Reality? (Or would non-SI real person fic be too crossover-y?)
Clever but yes, too self-referential. (Also, the underlying workings of Reality often verge on Shroedinger states)
It's curious, though; pokemon speech doesn't seem like it'd be easily transliterated. Do names that pokemon recieve in the absence of human culture exist as things exactly compatible with the Roman alphabet? Irin seems like she might have had a lot of contact with humans before, if she can speak English fluently; was there only one way to say her name in English, or did she adapt it to the closest word...?
Artistic liberty, I'm afraid. The absol is supposed to be a counterpoint to the rest of the team, so she has a name while they don't and she can express herself without it being translated. She's meant as more or less of a demigod, so she lacks certain restrictions. Her speech is an expression of this, not a sign of earlier experience with humans, although she might have run into them before.
Pokemon names are an especially thorny issue. I've never heard a good way of resolving it. Like most people, I normally prefer to dodge by not naming, using nicknames, or using names assembled from words, where they could be translated. (I avoided mentioning what Saurius' actual name was for similar reasons.) Sometimes authors go with transliterated names, but that seems pretty unwieldy. I remember Dragonfree jumped through hoops to avoid the problem entirely in her story.