Wait, spoke too soon

[farla]

Just gave a handful of reviews and it seems the stupid has returned. I guess that's what I get for leaving so many stories unreviewed for a while. Still nothing particularly bitchy, though. Just:

Well, thanks for the review!

To start off, pokemon actually do need a capital letter.
That second bit, I don't really understand what you mean. Who's speech are
you referring to? I've reread the story and I can't see what you're talking
about.

'Seriously, pick up a book or something, this is basic, basic stuff.'
Okay, that was really rude.

I'm sorry about the stuff in brackets. I just didn't want people to read that
line and wonder what the heck I was going on about when she mentioned the
'Creative' fiasco. I apologise if it took away from your enjoyment of the
story.

Jade is actually a shade of green...

Yes, orbs are eyes. Very observant!
I had used 'eyes' previously in the sentence, so I didn't want repetition.

I didn't instantly post the story after I'd written it. Believe it or not, I
went over it many times to check I was happy with it.

I don't suppose you have any comments about the story itself, or indeed
anything to say that's even remotely friendly? It's nice to have a little
recognition of what I did well instead of a review focusing on negative
things.

I appreciate your review, and I hope you reply answering my query about the
dialogue!
ArcanineOod xX
^_^

Note: they are a beta reader. "Grammar and spelling are my best areas, and also sentence structure. I'm very spelling and grammar minded, so I guess that's where I excel in beta-reading."

Fucking FFN.

Comments

[farla.livejournal.com]

And you should understand that the dialogue bit is something I've got a shortcut for in OpenOffice because I've had to say it so much. Almost every story was making the same mistake as yours or a related one. Look, this initiative you've shown coming here is great. But you could also use that initiative to try to find this out on your own - googling something like "dialogue rules" will provide you with plenty of sites to explain in greater detail.

As to the story itself: No, I'm afraid not. I don't much care for romances, so I can't really give much of a response, or at least not one that'd be of use to you. It's really hard for me to tell the difference between a legitimate storyline issue and something that's just a matter of preference, and I'm only barely familiar with the characters.