What a Sword Is For, Letterbomb
Dec. 29th, 2010 11:59 pmhttp://archiveofourown.org/works/123909
What a Sword Is For
It is even for slicing the rusted stems of mailboxes she picks, like flowers, simply because looking at them makes her feel happy.
This is an oddly cute and oddly nice detail - nice to think she's happy about the mailboxes she collects, and not simply running on some strange obligation.
She has nothing to link her to Prospit. Yet, after all these years, she still has the Regisword to link her to Derse.
And then this is such a depressing thing to think of. You do a good job throughout at taking the details and making more out of them. There's so many tiny things that can get skimmed over as just part of the story, instead of thinking of what they meant to the people involved.
And AR's dialogue is perfect. It fits with what happens, and it's sort of heartbreaking that his explanation of why he attacked them is basically the same as what as she's in the process of doing - they're all acting under as if they're not under their own control. And the apology afterward is darkly funny.
http://archiveofourown.org/works/124835
Letterbomb
Cue shenanigans.
You weren't kidding. You do a good job of pacing with this, a slow build to the letter, Jack's first attempts to deal with it, then an increasing pileup of plans and counterplans and more and more people getting involved. And you do a good job of getting across the feel of Derse in little details, from Jack's job security to the Dignitary not killing his coworkers because they'll only be replaced.
I can't say anyone involved here is that good of a person, but they're certainly terribly entertaining people all the same, and at least everyone in the drama is about as stabby. And despite that they're all quite distinct. The Dignitary the most, in a lot of ways, since he's the only one to keep his cool for (almost) the whole fic. And there's something about The Dignitary does not make a face, even after the Regulator leaves because he's not a child and he doesn't need to make faces to feel superior. that's just perfect.
I can't quite figure out what was going on with the arrow, though. I assumed it was a distraction but I couldn't figure out how it'd got there.
What a Sword Is For
It is even for slicing the rusted stems of mailboxes she picks, like flowers, simply because looking at them makes her feel happy.
This is an oddly cute and oddly nice detail - nice to think she's happy about the mailboxes she collects, and not simply running on some strange obligation.
She has nothing to link her to Prospit. Yet, after all these years, she still has the Regisword to link her to Derse.
And then this is such a depressing thing to think of. You do a good job throughout at taking the details and making more out of them. There's so many tiny things that can get skimmed over as just part of the story, instead of thinking of what they meant to the people involved.
And AR's dialogue is perfect. It fits with what happens, and it's sort of heartbreaking that his explanation of why he attacked them is basically the same as what as she's in the process of doing - they're all acting under as if they're not under their own control. And the apology afterward is darkly funny.
http://archiveofourown.org/works/124835
Letterbomb
Cue shenanigans.
You weren't kidding. You do a good job of pacing with this, a slow build to the letter, Jack's first attempts to deal with it, then an increasing pileup of plans and counterplans and more and more people getting involved. And you do a good job of getting across the feel of Derse in little details, from Jack's job security to the Dignitary not killing his coworkers because they'll only be replaced.
I can't say anyone involved here is that good of a person, but they're certainly terribly entertaining people all the same, and at least everyone in the drama is about as stabby. And despite that they're all quite distinct. The Dignitary the most, in a lot of ways, since he's the only one to keep his cool for (almost) the whole fic. And there's something about The Dignitary does not make a face, even after the Regulator leaves because he's not a child and he doesn't need to make faces to feel superior. that's just perfect.
I can't quite figure out what was going on with the arrow, though. I assumed it was a distraction but I couldn't figure out how it'd got there.
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Date: 2010-12-30 05:03 am (UTC)