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You have received a reply from the author, Frederic Marile, regarding the
review you posted for:

Title: All Fun and Games
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6662393/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2115947/

I see your points.


In subtitles officially affiliated with the anime and movies, Pokémon,
Charizard, etc. are always capitalized. That would be my reasoning for that.
After reading over my story again, I am quite confident that I followed all of
your supposed guidelines dialogue-wise. I did not use commas or incorrect
capitals at any point in the entire chapter.
Also, I like to make my stories easy to read and not boring and simple. I
don't want it to be so tedious and verb-repetitive that it's actually
repulsive. I believe you'll forgive me if I decide to use different speech
verbs sometimes.
I also believe dialogue is much better for describing and introducing
characters. Last time I checked, the characters in a story were at least as
important as their surroundings. Not more important necessarily but as
And finally, I'd appreciate it if you actually had something remotely positive
to say along with your criticism next time you review. I can deal with
constructive appeal, and I understand that's what your review was, but really.
Try something creditably kind.


You have received a reply from the author, zipperino, regarding the review you
posted for:

Title: Speed the Buizel
Chapter: 2
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6665711/2/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2392997/

Dude, that's something my teacher would tell me. That new speaker new
paragraph thing is your wetting style, not mine.

Name: zipperino
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2392997/

Subject: My story

Non story chapter banned my butt. I read some of the reviews for your story
and SO many people hate you! I read a couple of your stories and try just
suck! Why don't you try using you brain and you imagination in some of your
stories! You have the right grammar and vocabulary and stuff but people come
to this site to read cool and fun stories, your stories are BS! So stop
talking shit about my stories!

You have received a reply from the author, Mekon, regarding the review you
posted for:

Title: The Black Latios
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6667359/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2217186/

Wow. I should have caught those errors. Goes to show that I really need to
work on proofreading.
Thank you for telling me about these mistakes.
As a writer I am mortified that I made so many.
I appreciate it a lot, and will go back to make the appropriate changes.

Name: CptKirk
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2565898/

Subject: re: Your review to Bounded

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6653895/

In your review, you mention that the fic is not a "very good original fiction,
one of those short scene ones that doesn't properly develop into a story."
What do you mean by this? While I do see that the "plot" has no real conflict
or resolution per say, I am curious as to what your input is.

Name: Miss Kiko
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1488253/

Subject: re: Your review to Hogwarts Pokemon

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6668882/

so you're against OC stories and aganst good girls
good to know
ya know, best story on ff i've ever read is a story with only OC's from random
so i don't agree with you

Name: Musicalmelodys
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2705539/

Subject: re: Your review to Adventures in Sinnoh

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6664094/

Thank you for your advice

You have received a reply from the author, The Warrior of Many Faces,
regarding the review you posted for:

Title: Poisoned Heart
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6663182/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1754542/

Sorry, Farla, you've mentioned the capitalization issue and I respectfully
disagree. That, at least, is not changing.
Overpowered? Maybe. But the way I have this, he's a mechanical genius who's
had years to get ready for this.
Look, I don't mind the negative review. Especially if I deserve it. But
swearing at me helps your case none. I don't like swearing and if I see it
again in your reviews, I'll ignore them completely.
Why not? Beedrill are bee-like. It's not explicitly stated in the canon that
Beedrill can't be bribed.
Nonsensical problems? Sorry, not seeing the 'nonsensical-ness' of them. If you
don't explain further, I'm not likely to figure it out on my own, now am I?
He invented the translators. That's why it's a big deal.
I do thank you for reviewing, though. Last time you did, I realized that your
points had something to them. I eventually deleted the fic. The fact that I
can defend this fic against your points this time argues in its favor. At
least in my opinion. Thank you for your time.

Name: Sky Blue Storm
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2671143/

Subject: oh shut up

oh shut up,I really don't need flames right now,I'm gonna delete it soon

You have received a reply from the author, Thelastgreatrocker17, regarding the
review you posted for:

Title: Between friends
Chapter: 1
Story URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6666125/1/
Author URL: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1916211/

I appreciate your review.

I'll say you caught some good points there, like the nouns and sh8t but the
reason I capitalized Pikachu and Noctowl was because they are the names of the
characters. Pikachu and Noctowl are names in this story and should be
capitalized, and I am not putting Ash's in front of each of their names
everytime I write them.

Also your ending sentence "This is going Nowhere good", what does that mean?
Seriously, does it mean the plot sucks? Does it mean you have a similar
prejudice to lemons like I do? Does it mean that you've lost all hope in this
story because of the grammar and spelling?

I await your reply in a few hours.



Name: Reiberi
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2705161/

Subject: re: Your review to The Ambassadors
Thank you for your review! I hope you don't mind if I reply to some specific parts of it, since it was so in-depth.

"Please don't invent your own plot holes."

I was slightly confused as to what you meant by this. Were you making a point about the unbelievability of their mission? I would love if you could explain that further.

"...and why can't he wait, exactly?"

There's no logical reason he couldn't, of course. One of the character traits I was hoping would come across in Rowley is that he's pretty nosy. That may be my own fault for not making that more clear.

"For one thing, it's "bent" and "leaped". For another, so what?"

Whoops, missed those. Thanks! As for his reaction, I found it realistic considering he's observing something that should be physically impossible. If I had gone to the zoo and seen a lion or lizard with human limbs, I think I would be equally shocked and repulsed.

The bolded dialogue is a matter of preference. Sometimes I have a difficult time, especially when reading off the screen, picking out dialogue from large blocks of text. It's a habit I started in RP and it's crossed over into my writing. None of my beta readers have expressed concern over it, so I've kept it that way.

Thanks for the dialogue tips, too. That's something I've always struggled with (English and all it's rules!).

"[She was a special project. Shipped the DNA all the way from Sinnoh. She ain't
braggin', though," He snickered. "Uptight, ain't she?" ]


I was also confused about the statement you were trying to make here, and whether it was directed at Grimsy or Brian. If it was about Grimsy I'm assuming you were put off by the fact that she was a "special project". That was something I planned (and still plan) on exploring in the continuation of the story. I could be wrong here, though. Please correct me if I am.

This sort of thing is actually why I really don't think explaining in detail would help. This was part of a pair of quotes and I ended by saying I hated the speaker. It takes effort to interpret that as being about the first line of a full paragraph I quoted.

"What exactly is so horrible about this? She doesn't look injured and she's not
behaving like she's in pain. You keep having people react like this is the
most horrible thing ever. People don't flip out at monkeys because they look
kind of like people with fur. Moreover, given a lot of the pokemorphs were
born human, they still legally have human rights. No one seeing a bunch of
injured people would think the right response was to shoot them and put them
out of their misery, and they wouldn't start trying to nitpick about how maybe
they just looked like people but actually weren't."

The distinction here is that people grew up with monkeys; we aren't scared by them because they are an accepted creature of earth. Think more along the lines of... oh, we'll go with Bigfoot. Bigfoot freaks people out because-- even though they are more or less like monkeys-- it's something that we don't see every day, and something that most people don't believe exists. In my mind, discovering these pokemon-human hybrids is akin to catching Bigfoot... and then realizing it can communicate.

I'm glad you caught the fact that they legally have rights. That's another thing I was wanting to explore in the continued story. They're born human, just like blacks and Jews and gays. Yet the latter three have all had their rights taken, denied, or violated, simply based on the way they acted or looked.

"You don't even do that to injured animals, for god's sake."

A lot of people do, unfortunately. Test animals, especially, since often they are too physically or psychologically scarred to be introduced into regular life.

"Or this. Why exactly are odd looking people so terrifying in a world that
ALREADY HAS MONSTERS? Is she seriously more scary than a rhydon?"

I'd assume they would draw their gun against a threatening pokemon as well. At least, I would, haha. As for the monster thing, it goes back to the Bigfoot example. It would be one thing to be approached by a monkey, but by Bigfoot? How do you deal with something that you've never encountered before? Everyone has their own reaction, of course. This is simply one exploration of the human defense mechanism.

"Not punching innocent people and leaving them to die is not actually some
amazing display of goodness. What the hell."

I'm not sure if you were directing this to me as a writer or simply commenting on Brian's skewed perception of kindness. I'm going with the latter because that was what I was going for, haha.

Thanks again for your in-depth review. I hope I've clarified some of the confusing aspects of the story; sometimes I forget that people can't know my thought process. I'll keep that in mind for the rest of the story and will try to be clearer in my writing.


There's some bonus review defense by an anon who seems on exactly the same wavelength as the author, too. http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6663806/

Name: Matt the fox
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1896424/

Subject: re: Your review to Serperior And Lilligant

I actually laughed at your review, you hit the ball dead on. The only problem
is that you act like a complete douche to numerous members; when your own fics
are somewhat lacking something.

I hope to get a reply from you so I can explain what's missing.

Yours faithfully,

Matt the fox


Date: 2011-01-25 01:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ember-reignited.livejournal.com
I kind of have to agree — for the most part — on the pokemorphs story. It did go over the top in places, but yeah, I think most people probably would be majorly freaked out by stumbling into that lab. People freak out about science they don't understand that is even less of a big deal. Those of us who have training in biology are kind of curve-breakers in that regard. This is one of those cases where "how would I react" is not a good substitute for "how would most people react."

Brian's still a psychopath.

Date: 2011-01-25 02:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] farla.livejournal.com
It was that freaking out = shooting. Everyone kept acting like they were brain eating Hitler zombies or something. If it was "oh my god how could the scientists have done this to you" I wouldn't have minded.

I mean, people are horrified by animal testing all the time, and yet they generally don't start jumping and aiming guns at blinded chimps.

Date: 2011-01-25 02:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ember-reignited.livejournal.com
Yeeeeeah, that was where it started to get over the top, like I said. At least with the suggestion that MOST people would act like that, and not just a very noisy minority. Although the author might again defend that as the pokemorphs' perceptions being skewed by having to plan for the worst. So if nothing else it's a clarity issue.

Date: 2011-01-25 02:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] farla.livejournal.com
Well, that's how all the police did act, if anything the pokemorphs were optimistic. And okay, so biologists might take it in stride, but so should police officers, who should be trained to deal with kidnappings and injured people.

Date: 2011-01-25 02:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ember-reignited.livejournal.com
Ah, okay, I'd just skimmed it and hadn't realized there was more than one person waving a gun around. Yeah, point taken.

Date: 2011-01-25 02:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ember-reignited.livejournal.com
Just for example, a lot of religious people believe that a human clone would not have a soul. You can bet that those people would treat such a being pretty atrociously should one ever occur.

Date: 2011-01-25 02:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] farla.livejournal.com
Eh, if the story better established this was some horrible taboo I'd grant that, but it seemed to be taking the neutral view that this was inherently horrific. Plus I doubt anyone but the most fanatic of them would actually start shooting six year old girls if they found some, let alone arguing with adults that they were clones and not people who'd had organ transplants from clones like they claimed.

Date: 2011-01-25 02:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] charizamdc.livejournal.com
I await your reply in a few hours.

That's one of the wankiest things I've ever seen.

I'm stealing it.


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