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Jan. 18th, 2005 08:48 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
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Chapter Two of Unoriginality: AAMLudicrousness is up.
Let's see how many people figure out the last line, shall we?
Chapter Two of Unoriginality: AAMLudicrousness is up.
Let's see how many people figure out the last line, shall we?
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Date: 2005-01-19 02:14 am (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2005-01-19 07:44 am (UTC)Loved the chapter, very good. Poor May always gets bashed...
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Date: 2005-01-21 01:38 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-01-19 09:44 pm (UTC)I have an old story I wrote a while ago. I'm wondering whether it's a lost cause that I should simply throw out, or whether it's remotely fixable. (I promise that I'll either *actually* follow your suggestions or simply delete the story if I can't find a way to make it better.)
-Link- (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2028003/1/)
Be warned. We have an angsty Team Rocket Main
SueCharacter with a very stereotypical Pokemon.I am not fragile. Go ahead and be merciless as usual. (Not that you needed prompting anyway.)
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Date: 2005-01-21 03:24 am (UTC)Not quite sure whether it's worth fixing or not, but I'll give it a try (if only for practice.) I'll first have to get rid of the damn Eevee (Venomnat maybe?), chuck the part about it not staying in its ball, fix the "Bit," have her take off her gloves (which makes a lot of sense, now that I think about it),
kill off...i meandelete the nine year old who is useless to the plot anyway, get rid of the being-late part, and hmm...About the not-treating-grunt-pokemon part, would it be too forced/trite/ridiculous if I implied that because Team Rocket was such a large underground corporation that its smaller subunits might not pay too much attention to their lower members? I think that's pretty much what I had in mind back when I wrote it, but now I'm unsure as to whether that makes sense or not.
Anyway, thanks. XD Just letting you know *someone* appreciates the work you put into reviews. :D
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Date: 2005-01-21 10:03 pm (UTC)Treating pokemon...that really depends on your idea of Team Rocket. Mob-style governing involves treating the grunts well to gain loyalty, for example. My concept of it is more bureaucratic, like a corrupt government. There's also the possibility of it being a harsh but not sadistic organization. With the first, the lowest level ones wouldn't get much, but they'd be well treated. With the second, the people in charge of treating the pokemon might be pocketing the money instead, or only working for those who can make it worth their time. With the third, they might not be willing to do much - if a pokemon is weak enough to die from the training, it obviously wasn't worth keeping around, say. A sink or swim kind of system. They certainly wouldn't be interested in the pokemon's personal comfort and might only patch it up as much as was needed, so she'd still need to get potions on her own to complete the job.
Or, Team Rocket might kill weak pokemon, so she's too afraid to take it to be treated/has already taken it in too often. Or she's gone over her healing allowance for the week/month. Or the guy in charge hates her. Or her pokemon is one she took against the rules and she doesn't want to attract attention to it. There are a lot of possibilities. Try to figure out which make the best sense to you.
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Date: 2005-01-21 01:41 am (UTC)May/Nightcrawler. Theirloveissorandom.